Reviews for WITCH: Book I: The Inbetween
SheWolfMedjai chapter 27 . 9/7/2020
Awe that was cute! Can't wait to see what's next!
SheWolfMedjai chapter 7 . 9/6/2020
Okay that was not what I expected. So she can lessen the pain, huh, cool.
LoveIsBound chapter 17 . 3/4/2020
I am going to give this story a try but I thought to let you know my thoughts before i continue. First thing great storyline but for me i think the most weird thing is that the girls are still in their teens. The story would be great if you gave them age of being 20 or something. Maybe its due to my childhood but I didn't learn to swear until i was over the age of 18. THe marriage idea is great again its the age that a bit weird. I know in some cultures there are such thing as Teen Bride but this story is set in America ( i think) and from what i know its very westernised.

You could also give the characters a bit more depth. I mean currently I feel like they have shallow feelings like with Matt he wants her back. You could write that Will could not believe how he thinks its about him and she should know her heart. Don't be afraid to use monologue.

Apart from the story is good and like I said I will continue reading as it intrigued me.
Hope you don't find that I am critising it too much.
Thanks heaps for a good story.
Emeira chapter 27 . 12/5/2019
Thank you for that fiction! I like the pairing Will/Phobos! Canon Will is my favorite character of the Guardians, she has her weaknesses, defaults, but she's able to question herself.
Cornelia is a bit difficult to like sometimes : when something does not please, agree with her, she's quick to point Will is not a good leader, that you describe much more in your fic.
I hope Cornelia will reconciliate with Will, Irma, Hay-Lin and Taranee. It would be too bad for them personnaly and (sadly) "politicaly" since the role of Guardians was imposed on these five girls.
ultrachols chapter 27 . 4/28/2019
great story.
BRcrazygirl chapter 27 . 3/31/2019
I can not believe it's over, but I'm happy.

It is very good to be able to find authors who are willing to finish their stories. Thank you very much for that.

This fiction made me laugh and twist and although did not present the conspiracies that I expected (I really wanted to see a powerful Elyon getting ready to dethrone her brother) I had a lot of fun reading and watching the unfolding of fiction.

The OCS were very creative. I admit that Sophia was my favorite and I would like to know more about her. I just do not understand why Kandrakar let her out unscathed, if I were the Oracle I would have sent that mercenary to the prison.

Some characters acted more submiss than I expected: Phobos and Will for example. Even though there was no cure for the poison, I was expecting a temporary alliance with the guardians in a quest for a cure. Since the royal wedding with Will would do away with the attempts of Phobos to conquer other worlds and destroy the friendship with Cornelia.

If there was a sequel, I would like to see a greater focus on other characters. For example: Caleb and the rebellion. Cornelia and a possible reconciliation with Will. And Nerissa (please never asked you for anything !)

And why not? The most beloved character in the entire series: Cedric. Still, I hope shapeshifter Lord having learned some cruelty from his master and being planning something grandiose (like what it did at the end of the show's second season ...)

If there is a sequence I would like the past of Meridian and the royal family to be explored. Why Phobos became cruel, for example. And also what will become of Julian, Caleb's father.

I do not know if it's your intention, but since you asked, I'm responding honestly. ;)
Bella4evr3 chapter 27 . 3/31/2019
I absolutely loved it. I ship will and Phobos too much! Lol:) a sequel would be great, but as the others say, only if you’re up to it!
Paul Larimone chapter 27 . 3/30/2019
Whoa! This story is literally amazing! I'm not a big of WillxPhobos, but I love how you try to find reasons to support the story, like why Will decides to marry Phobos or how the poison works, they make the story make sense, and also the charaters design of the three OCs is great. I have to admit that I read it nonstop for about 9 hours. I had read it since around the midnight and now it is 9 a.m. I have not slept yet lol. Anyway, looking forward to the sequel :) and goooodnight! Lol
Guest chapter 27 . 3/30/2019
I demand a porn chapter! I don’t care about sequel
Eygptian dragon chapter 27 . 3/28/2019
This is a great ending and I liked it since minus Cornelia. Her friends stood by her side. Mainly since a lot of Photos x Will fics I've come across have Cornelia making the girls kick Will out and replace her as leader (which I find stupid since Will is the only one that can use the Heart)

And I would love a sequel but that's all up to you.
Guest chapter 27 . 3/28/2019
Aw, great ending and I am so happy for them. I really think this is a really good story. I think in previous reviews I already answered the second question and making a sequel is up to you. Not really sure what I would like to see in a possible sequel.
MyaElla1 chapter 27 . 3/28/2019
I can't believe it's over! :( A sequel would be nice with more action in the inbetween dimension and more about it's characters. :)
Eygptian dragon chapter 26 . 3/27/2019
This story is great, can't wait to see what happens next
Guest chapter 26 . 3/25/2019
This story sucks.
Guest chapter 26 . 3/24/2019
Great chapter, despite what Phobos was doing was stupid it's great to see him being truthful about his feelings towards Will, can't wait for the wedding just hope nothing or no one ruins it, but I'll never know.
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