|Reviews for red dead redemption 2 chapter 4|
| Guest chapter 1 . 2/28/2019
| Michael Bell chapter 1 . 11/27/2018
I... What are you on about? Is this a fan fiction or a retelling of events in the game? Who's Michael? Is it meant to be Micah? Is the Red Sand City meant to be Rhodes? Saint Denis? Who's Zoe? Is it Mary?
As for your actual writing, you might want to start being more descriptive; longer sentences, separate paragraphs, have the story laid out, more than 200 words, take your time.
Try reading other writers like Orwell or Dostoyevsky.