The Grammer and writing is really bad and doesn't flow naturally. You should consider finding an editor.

he will protect the village even though they hate him ?
what kind of retard is he ?

UPDATE PLEASE!

I’m sorry but if only 9 makes. The cut they would have a 34 chance pass

Great story with plenty of action and suspense.
Story just needs to be updated.

Please update this

really nice story man

This story seems very interesting in the first few chapters like im already intrigued and can’t wait to read more

I hope you continue this!

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Ugh. Forbidden Scroll scene was a hot pile of garbage but the story is entertaining overall.

oh for fuck’s sake. the fucking ‘fail the exam and see what’s up’ trope. piece of shit.

Chp24

This is an awesome fic! I really have love reading this! I hope you update this soon.

Btw, I just wanna make things clear, Naruto doesn't hate killing, in Naruto Shippuden he had gained his first kill when he killed yura of the sand who was a traitor. How can I say that Naruto doesn't hate killing? Simple, he just looked at yura's body for 2seconds and then left, he didn't even feel remorse.

So please, I hope that in the upcoming update that you would stop it with Naruto and everyone else overreacting about killing since kinda getting annoying, especially since their shinobi's.

Anyways great chap, looking forward for more.

Chp23

Awsome chap! You've greatly improved in your grammar and just as I expected you have also improve on writing romance.

Chp22

Hmm, good chap

I can tell you really have made great improvement on your grammar.

Also I really hope that Naruto and Satsuki would be together soon.