Reviews for Rise of Prodigies
reaperblaze chapter 41 . 7/11
Best negima crossover I have read in a long time please more chapters
OBSERVER01 chapter 41 . 6/19
Chachamaru is the MVP of this update.
Nameless2210 chapter 41 . 6/18
Nitpicks:

1) "Inside the kitchen of villa that the owner of the arena where Negi-sensei and Kotarō-san were working as gladiators had provided them, a chibified Chachamaru critically eyed the bento lunches she had cooked for the Erímou Póli group of Ala Alba.: : "Inside the kitchen of the villa that the owner of the arena where Negi-sensei and Kotarō-san were working as gladiators had provided them, a chibified Chachamaru critically eyed the bento lunches she had cooked for the Erímou Póli group of Ala Alba."

2) "The slave shuddered at the prospect and Chachamaru could understand it." : "The slave shuddered at the prospect and Chachamaru could understand why."

3) "And thus her hasty retreating protocols activated and she was off." : "And thus her hasty retreat protocols activated and she was off."

4) "Yet Negi-Sensei vouched for him..." : :Yet Negi-sensei vouched for him..."

5) "he knew her Master was extremely biased when it came to anything related to Nagi-sama but still she hoped Negi-Sensei would not fall to Rakan-san's corruption." : "he knew her Master was extremely biased when it came to anything related to Nagi-sama but still she hoped Negi-sensei would not fall to Rakan-san's corruption."

6) "“Get back here you pervert! ..."" : "“Get back here, you pervert! ...""

7) ""Kincha, Hanpe, Konnya, Chikuwafu, Negi, Daiko, and Shirataki!"" : ""Kincha, Hanpe, Konnya, Chikuwafu, Negi, Daiko and Shirataki!""

8) "This quirk was one of the many reasons why Negi-sensei had chosen her as his alpha had he not?" : "This quirk was one of the many reasons why Negi-sensei had chosen her as his alpha wasn't it?"

9) "Negi-Sensei asked with that radiant smile." : "Negi-sensei asked with that radiant smile of his."
OBSERVER01 chapter 40 . 6/11
I have to agree that Haruna Pactio artifact simply is that terrifying as a force multiplyer when utilized properly
OBSERVER01 chapter 39 . 6/11
Thats a short Chisame chapter all right.
Nameless2210 chapter 40 . 6/11
Nitpicks:

1) "Haruna told herself with a smile as she took a seat and opened the contents of the mokeskin bag that contained all the cash she'd saved so far from her the earnings she'd amassed from catching bandits in the surrounding region and cashing in their bounties." : "Haruna told herself with a smile as she took a seat and opened the contents of the mokeskin bag that contained all the cash she'd saved so far from the earnings she'd amassed from catching bandits in the surrounding region and cashing in their bounties."

2) "With one more yawn and a lazy wave behind her, she entered her tent and the promise of some sleep." : "With one more yawn and a lazy wave behind her, she entered her tent and towards the promise of some sleep."
Nameless2210 chapter 39 . 6/11
Nitpicks:

1) "Days after the insanity at the Megalomesembria Gateport that marked their arrival to Mundus Magicus, Chisame was wandering the desert town of Erímou Póli that she, Negi-Sensei, Chachamaru, that Kotarō wolf boy, and three of her tagalong classmates were currently holed up in." : "Days after the insanity at the Megalomesembria Gateport that marked their arrival to Mundus Magicus, Chisame was wandering the desert town of Erímou Póli that she, Negi-sensei, Chachamaru, that Kotarō wolf boy, and three of her tagalong classmates were currently holed up in."

2) "Well, to evade bounty hunters she, Negi-Sensei and the wolf boy were all using variants of the Age Deceiving Pills to hide their true forms which were now plastered on wanted posters across the whole of Mundus Magicus." : "Well, to evade bounty hunters she, Negi-sensei and the wolf boy were all using variants of the Age Deceiving Pills to hide their true forms which were now plastered on wanted posters across the whole of Mundus Magicus."

3) "Thankfully, the remainder of the trip to the Net Cafe Shirataki found was uneventful." : "Thankfully, the remainder of the trip to the Web Cafe Shirataki found was uneventful."

4) "But for some reason it didn't seem to be stars for sure." : "But for some reason it didn’t seem to be working. Two stars for sure."

5) "The fake-lolita catgirl hissed like the feline she was imitating" : "The fake-lolita catgirl hissed like the feline she was imitating."
OBSERVER01 chapter 38 . 6/6
When Tsukuyomi of all people thinks your nuts, that says a lot about this Nodoka Saotome.
Amer2323 chapter 38 . 6/4
Hoo
Nameless2210 chapter 38 . 6/4
Nitpicks:

1) ". Below her were multiple magical circles dominated by six-point stars set in an elaborate array set in the pattern of the sefirot in Kabbalah that hovered in the emptiness of the massive cathedral-like building that was the transportation array." : ". Below her were multiple magical circles dominated by six-point stars set in an elaborate array arranged in the pattern of the sefirot in Kabbalah that hovered in the emptiness of the massive cathedral-like building that was the transportation array. "

2) "Or at least that's how everything was described in the helpful holographic displays set up at regular intervals along the floor length window of the lounge overlooked the aforementioned area and through which Nodoka was looking through, her eyes glued on the section that connected to Earth." : "Or at least that's how everything was described in the helpful holographic displays set up at regular intervals along the floor length window of the lounge that overlooked the aforementioned area and through which Nodoka was looking through, her eyes glued on the section that connected to Earth."

3) ""Eh, Fate, was it really a good idea to break this psycho from prison much less bring her along today?"" : ""Eh, Fate, was it really a good idea to break this psycho out from prison much less bring her along today?""

4) "The greenette was ready though and in the time that the swordswoman had set up her technique had conjured hundreds of Flying Kite Shields to create a wall in between her and the incoming attack." : "The greenette was ready though and in the time that the swordswoman had set up her technique had conjured hundreds of Flying Kite Shields to create a wall between her and the incoming attack."

5) "...the blasted woman said as set her ran her hand over her katana and setting it on fire for a brief moment before with a cry of Guren no Oodachi (Great Blade of Crimson), she spun and unleashed a circular wave of flames that easily dispatched both Haruna's attacking golems." : "...the blasted woman said as she ran her hand over her katana and setting it on fire for a brief moment before with a cry of Guren no Oodachi (Great Blade of Crimson), she spun and unleashed a circular wave of flames that easily dispatched both of Haruna's attacking golems."

6) "Nodoka clicked her tongue at the blockade and readied her heirloom to unleash another attack." : "Nodoka clicked her tongue at the barrier and readied her heirloom to unleash another attack."

7) ""...Just for those nut jobs that take a shot at you."" : ""...Something I dreamed up just for those nut jobs that take a shot at you.""

8) "The explosion sent the two girls flying away from one another, their protective wards the only things keeping them from being killed by the sheer intensity of the explosions if only barely." : "The explosion sent the two girls flying away from one another, their protective wards the only things keeping them from being killed by the sheer intensity of the explosion if only barely."
Azaira chapter 20 . 4/16
I think the only thing I don't like about this is that Ranma is tossing martial arts away entirely, especially since it was more of a gradual distancing at first. I could see her practicing it on occasion as a legacy thing and wanting to focus on an alternate primary, but having it feel like something along the lines of a near phobia just doesn't seem right.
(And she should have the perfect setup to learn the Kankaho!)

Otherwise, I am absolutely loving this story. It's written well, it flows well, and it's (usually) different enough from the canon story to not get boring. I am enjoying reading this story, and thank you for writing it!
OBSERVER01 chapter 37 . 4/10
Hate them Outsiders!
amerdism chapter 37 . 4/9
Shirk Evileyes? Did Shiraori from So I’m a Spider, so What? Just make an appearance, though if that’s true her personality was way off but I’m guessing you weren’t going for authenticity so much as to simply use the character? That sounds like an insult sorry, it’s not meant as one, I’m just pointing out that Shiraori rarely talks to anyone, especially those she isn’t close with.
Nameless2210 chapter 37 . 4/9
Nitpicks:

1) "The Mage of Beginning stated." : "The Mage of the Beginning stated."

2) "And just a small shoutout to Nameless2210 and his new completed story; The COuncil of Thirteen." : "And just a small shoutout to Nameless2210 and his new completed story; The Council of Thirteen."

Thanks for the shoutout E4E!
Nameless2210 chapter 36 . 4/2
Nitpicks:

1) "The majority were enlarged, featureless white irides with no visible pupils whilst a handful had a ripple pattern that spread over the eyeball." : "The majority had enlarged, featureless white irides with no visible pupils whilst a handful had a ripple pattern that spread over the eyeball."

And that's all I could spot. We did good with this chapter on the error front.

Also just to reiterate to anyone who reads this. This is not a full on Naruto crossover! Whilst the MoB's origins can be traced back to a Narutoverse, outside of hints to that fact and the use of the occasional Narutoverse jutsu and ability it does not have any relevance.
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