Seriously? What 12 year old acts like this, its a little too unrealistic. No 12 year old is this forward , and Hermione has gone from direct to extremely forward. It doesnt matter if shes almost 13 this is weird AF. Like why are you obsessed with the odea of two barely into puberty children being so sexually adventurous. Not to mention the fact that neither should feel comfortable with this. And i so fet the soul mates so they know they will be together. So why not? But no child would think like that even with all that. Its weird especialky considering neither are ready for more as they said. The idea that hermione is like yes harry i want u close to me and naked too , is absurd.

Months tbey are like 11 and 12 jesus H Christ! Like dont get me wrong i get it they basically are in love and yes most 11 and 12 year olds experiment if not have sex . But lets not be so hasty. Like 14 sure id accept it and not think twice especialky considering the longevity of their friendship/relationship but 11 and 12, perish the thought.

Gonna be honest, its such a strech and so flipping weird to see the Dursleys being decent human beings but i am quite enjoying it.

Replaying canon when it makes no sense is stupid.

""Well?" she urged him.

"Oh, I'm sorry. I was just admiring your looks. Here, you may have a look at it," he handed her the book.

"Don't mock me! I know I'm not beautiful," she said sharply, yet still took the book and looked at it."

That's exactly how 10 year olds would talk to each other... If you truly do wish for constructive criticism then that's it. Your younger characters always sound as if they are adults and not young children. It's not a minor problem either such as maybe a 14 year old sounding too mature. Your seven year olds sound like adults.

“Tens of people” sounds strange in English. Normally one would say “dozens of people”.

good

HEADBASTARDS MUST DIE.

All things considered Hermione's strongest trait is her intellect. Always in a book, whether library or common room. As for courage, wasn't she very reluctant to go for the duel with Malfoy, or for the dragon exchange? A mis-sort? Other than Harry, she seems inclined to Ravenclaw.

Re Authors Note: you ended the last chapter with a twelve year old feeling warm from someone touching her “budding breasts” and an eleven year old woth an erection. You made it sexual. I felt dirty even describing your words. May the FBI raid your computer.

Yikes. Youre over 50 and writing about child sex. Its a shame it led to this. I dont think I can continue. Its just way too creepy. Please use warnings in either the summary or first chapter that there will be depictions of underage sex.

bonne fic!

This is the end of a fascinating story. You show how people’s lives can be changed and redemption found. It also shows how much better Harry’s life can be when adults do their jobs.

You use magic in some interesting and unique ways not been in others’ stories.

Much enjoyed. TGM

No more Tommy! No more DeathEaters. Still 15 chapters to go.

TGM

Seems to be a walkover once again. No Binns, no Snape, no Basilisk and hopefully Slugharn won’t be too much of a trial.

Only thing outstanding is the Curse.

TGM