a good read.

okay another promising story abandoned

Fucking phenomenal. Nuff said.

This chapter is too long.

Next next next

There is only one thing wrong in this story... It stopped updating.
Too bad, it is a great tale

so mutch wrong with this melodramatic nasty stupid shit

it's really good writing i do have some problems with him keep giving up his damn lightsaber EVERY time he gets one. But if he uses the white crystal he has i won't have a problem. But truthfully he should do it soon without a lightsaber he is gonna get his ass kick by literally anyone.

I just have to tell you that this self insert is in a class of its own! Very well put together! I hope to read chapter 3 soon.

I hope you're alright and stay strong from people talking smack to you. but you're a great writer to both Spider-man and Star Wars. If you're coming back to writing self insert Skywalker. I think you should watch the Generation Tech perspective on Star Wars as it talks about flaws of certain beliefs and organizations on youtube. Your Skywalker could build a more stable Jedi order by influencing QuiGon on what the Jedi are meant to be.

please update this it's so good

Very hard to read. Your paragraphs are too short and as such the chapters are just line after line separated from each other with too much space in between. You have a lot of dialogue with too little writing between it. Show not tell.

Windu is the Master of the Order not the Grandmaster...

nvm

... moron, he could have used one of the pearls for a lightsaber.