I was here for [Harry, Hermione, Susan], but have gotten none of that. Instead it's all Hurt/Comfort/Family, massively overdone cliches, wimpy MC, and plot holes. I read reviews going to the end of the story and it appears that all of that only gets worse rather than better, so I'm out. This is well written, but the plot and pacing suck.

"Seven EQUAL sections: half for me..." Umm, wut?

And half of 25 million is not 10 million. The math in this chapter is flat wrong.

If portkeys out worked, the entire plot of book 4 is pointless and nonsensical, since the entire thing revolved around getting Harry to win the tournament and get snagged by the ONLY PORTKEY that would actually work since it was made by Dumbledore prior to being "modified" by Crouch.

Last chapter: "Dumbledore cast a silent, WANDLESS compulsion charm"
This chapter: "One of the Aurors tested [Dumbledore's wand] for the last few spells he cast and found he compulsed someone very recently"

Nope. Nopenopenope.

As for Kingsley trying Sirius right before Dumbledore in order to find more evidence against Dumbledore, I can't tell whether this is meant to further showcase just how fucked up wizarding "justice" is, or if the author has no idea how courts and the discovery process actually work. It might be both.

So far this story should be called "Amelia Bones and Solving All the Potter Problems" since Harry has so little agency that he's basically a bit-part player. As it stands, at a third of the way through I'm not sure I'll finish the story since the title character barely matters except as a plot device.

"From what I've read of portkeys"? Hermione TOOK A PORTKEY just about a year ago to the World Cup. With Ron!

Susan with the Elder Wand is kinda funny, though.

It's unclear here whether Pomfrey is evil, stupid, incompetent, or oathbound, because the prior chapter made it very clear that Harry had long-term damage that any half-competent school medic should see and do something about. The fact that she ONLY offers Luna a bed rather than doing anything more, such as talking with Filius, implies that she somehow can't or won't get involved with student problems, indicating at the very least evil or oathbound rather than merely stupid.

i enjoyed your brilliancy so far but please tell me that you will not have an evil Snape?

hmmm. Could Amelia go with Hermione at the same time that Dumbles goes there?

oh, no! Dumbles goes free! What should happen, so that he could be punished acordly?!
What about Severus?

oh, the Elder wand with Susan?! I didn't expected that! Brilliant!

oooh! Way to go, 'Mione!

i have read so many "Harry was abused" stories (including canon, of course :) ) but it is the first time when I read an investigation. And it is brilliant!

oh, my. Neville was amazing, but so was Luna!

It makes me wonder why, if they immediately knew as soon as it crossed the threshold, why they never reacted the same way to Harry…

Good story. Thank you not only for writing it but sharing it!

I truly hope you are all doing great.

I really enjoyed how you took down Dumbledore.

You do an excellent job of creating the feeling of romance between the triad.