I wish us readers could have read "Witches who made it".
You meant "getured around, talking fast" and "She frowned a little, reading it quickly".

You meant "quite soon. If you would?", "In that case I'm really sorry" and "lot of James' qualities".
JHRC! at the idiotic cornelius fudge trying to implement the kiss on sight order the instant he and that sodding dementor were inside Hogwarts and Dumbles' office.

Nice fanfiction so far

This is better than most garbage but it lacks depth and like I said previously no one is really acting like an actual person. The fact that Remus and Narcissa both shrieked at hearing Voldemort was ridiculous and nobody fears the name Voldemort but they fear the fact that he cursed the name so that whenever someone says it he is made aware of their location.

So far this story lacks any real depth or structure. It honestly feels like a pretty bad angsty teenage girl drama at the moment with how fake everyone feels.

I feel like this story is a little to focused on the evil and manipulative Dumbledore tropes that are far to common.

Floo is safer for populated areas where you dont know where someone could be standing and it would make sense to not allow anyone to say teleport into the white house so there would be anti wards so floo is acceptable and not apparition

Thanks for the update.

Glad to see you working on this again. Interesting insight into Bellatrix. Very curious to see where you take this next. Thanks for your hard work on this chapter.

I am glad you are back, but I am confused by the Rosier family, you have Daphne saying they died out, but you also have them alive with the Black family

This ended this story for me. I hate Dumbledore and I especially hate Sirius. The man literally turned away from his duty to Harry and went after Petigrew you don't freaking do that. Also you wrote in your authors note Harry wont be as strong as Dumb-as-a-dore which is stupid. Albie is an old man, Harry showed incredible magical power in his third year. They shouldn't be that far apart.

Great

For me this chapter was one pf the mos interest. I really enjoyed when reading about Krabbe & Goyle (don't know how to write it in english, it's not my native language and my english is very bad, sorry). Thery are not your common stupid berserkers from 90% of fictions. Moment when Goyle and Voldy talking about magic theory and literature was brilliant. Thanks!

That’s why Snape remained unredeemable. It was never his fault

Worse than having Fawkes stomp him.

Great job