I appreciate what you did with Narcissa in this chapter. I felt all along that you had made her too nice and sweet. This is so much better. She's better as a bad ass like she was with Snape.

I’m grateful for the quick upload, Narcissa is quite the charmer before she hits hard! Can’t wait to see more.

You never speak about the potter family like they are of no importance but you set yourself for A VERY BIG PLOT SIRIUS RUN FROM HIS PARENTS TO THE POTTER , HIS PARENTS DIDNT DO ANYTHING . IT DIDNT MATTER THAT THEY PRACTICALY DISOWN HIM , THEY WOULD HAVE DONE SOMETHING AS A MATTER OF PRIDE . SO THE FACT THAT THEY DIDNT IT MEANS THAT THE POTTER HAS AT LEAST AS MUCH OR MORE POLITTICAL , SOCIAL AND WEALTH AS THE BLACK . AS FOR PEVERELL THEY SHOULD BE ON THE BLACK LEVEL , IT DOSENT MAKE ANY SENSE FOR THEM TO BE LOWER THEN THE BLACKS . AS FOR NARCISSA DOWRY IT WILL MAKE MUCH MORE SENSE THAT MALFOY PAIED TO BE ABLE TO MARY HER , NOT THE OTHEF WAY AROUND BC HE WANTED TO MARRY ABOVE HIS STATION . AS FOR THE DEATHLY HALLOWS IF YOU WANT TO USE THEM CONSIDER THAT FROM THE 3 ONLY THE CLOACH WAS PART OF DEATH , THE REST WERE MADE BY DEATH BUT THE CLOACH WAS MAYBE AS OLD AS DEATH HIMSELF AND MAYBE CAME INTO EXISTENCE AT THE SAME TIME AS DEATH HIMSELF .

The next chapter better be uploaded... Now? I want to see how deep in the ground Narcissa puts Snape!

Please get a beta to go through your story for spelling and grammatical errors. I think it could be a great story but because of all the errors giving me a headache I can’t continue past chapter 3.

I am loving your story and I look forward to your next installment. I like that you have included Newt Scarmander as teacher for Care of Magical Creatures.
The dynamic between Harry and Narcissa is a interesting one and one that I think that Harry needs in his life. Granted he has had Molly for a while now, but he needs another woman to show/teach him the finer things in the wizarding world like manners and etiquette.

You had Katie Bell say of the Tournament that there is a price. Did you mean price as in a consequence, or did you mean prize as in a reward?

Something needs to be done about Snape. All those detentions for no reason! Teachers should not be allowed to bully students.

I love newt keep it coming

I like your story, but am finding your style with conversation quotes very difficult to follow.

You are starting the conversations correctly with new paragraphs when you change speakers. But, post quote, you then have a different character reacting to the quote without a paragraph marker and this is really hard to follow.

for example :

"Please pass my apology to Susan and tell her I said hi." Amelia nodded, embarrassing...

This is very difficult to read. It reads like Amelia is the speaker. You do this constantly, and it breaks the flow from the reader being able to completely surrender to the story as he has to figure out who was talking to who.

It should be:

"Please pass my apology to Susan and tell her I said hi."

Amelia nodded, embarrassing...

thanks!

I don't buy your story line that Narcissa Malfoy wants muggleborn students to learn anything about the wizarding world. She was still using the word mudblood over the summer. She's a product of a Black upbringing. In fact, I hate everything you've done with her. I especially hate that replaced her son, Draco with Harry. Harry doesn't need her as a mother!

Thanks on the Snape front. I really don't like Snape redemption stories. He's a cruel and evil man who caused the death of his obsession, Lily Potter. He was not in love in Lily; he was obsessed with her. Plus, his treatment of Harry during all of his school years was criminal.

It's funny that you wrote Flames instead of Flamel several times. Also, to disclose means to let out, so Sirius shouldn't say he wants to keep he information disclosed about Remus being a werewolf. In fact, it would be the opposite.

Compromise? Keeping Harry cooped up doesn't help anything. Isn't there any place he go besides Diagon Alley? Why can't he visit Hermione, or go to the Burrow? Why not a trip to muggle London. Why does it have to be all or nothing?

Hermione isn't Mrs. Granger; she's Miss Granger as she is an unmarried female. Mrs. is for married women.