Reviews for Dobby's Deceit |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Was Snapes lawyer hired for him by the Malfoys or Dumbledore? Update soon. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I’ve really enjoyed this fanfic! So many layers and details and I love how you’ve developed the different character's. Will you be completing this fic? |
![]() ![]() ![]() One if the small errors, I'd kind of put in SPaG category, which crop up time to time. I've generally ignored, plus it's like nitpicking, job for beta or editor or proofreader. I put two in mobile clipboard as examples of this type of error I refer. When it seems the text might be written to imply opposite of what seems what intent reader would expect. Eg. Like I'd be telling secrets I'd rather only tell my mom, you know?" [[This is less cut and dried. Maybe this was intended. But maybe it was intended to say "rather not tell my mom" If it's not an inverted meaning. I'd point out, that without a mom or parental figure Harry was ok confiding, it's kind of a poor phrasing anyway.]] of extra that told him that the magic was a fit for his own [[ maybe meant to say? "...magic was NOT a fit..."]] |
![]() ![]() ![]() The reduced compensation & siphoning some to Ron, as punishment, regarding Ginny, a bit petty. It's like a flip side of typical lopsided fanon disbursements, such as Sirius Will gotta leave PRICELESS Black library to Hermione, leaving Weasleys a few times greater amount than Remus, or Harry drawing up a Will and leaving the ship/fiance, similar amount as bequests to various others. |
![]() ![]() ![]() you'll love falafel and other oriental foods," ?"and other" implies falafel is asian. More like Egypt to Syria, Lebanon...etc spreading into Mediterranean. give me chores and stuff, but they don't like me walking about the neighbourhood too much." You've put the Dobby pop-along taxi service in play. Obviously Dobby can pop Harry over to other neighborhoods, parks, gyms ...Hermione's home. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I read this story awhile back and really enjoyed it then. It was worth rereading it again. I really enjoy long well thought out stories that captivate you and keeps on going with well thought out dialog and feeling. I hope in the near future you will continue and complete this work. It is marvelous. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Another great chapter. Snape is really despicable. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I wonder if Lavender's parents could hire house elves to work for them on a part time basis? It would allow the elves to be busy in many households and get magic from each one instead of getting it all from one wizard. |
![]() ![]() ![]() thank you for sharing a wonderful, intricately plotted story. It has been a joy to read over the last few days. I hope that you are doing well, and at some point in the future will have the desire to finish this tale. If not, so be it, it has been worthwhile none the less. Warmest regards Ken North Carolina |
![]() ![]() ![]() that is an amazing and touching chapter. Thanks for giving Harry such happy memories. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I have very much enjoyed reading this story! i know other works seem to be your priority from what i see in ao3, but i hope you eventually decide to continue this one! stay well. |
![]() ![]() Being almost 4 years since the last update I an only assume that the author has shuffled off this mortal coil. Cocked up her toes. Taken the eternal dirt nap. Whatever. Otherwise, given the lack of updating, I would have expected this tale to be marked as abandoned. Alas, I doubt I'll ever know. Ciao. |
![]() ![]() Quote: 'The tall glass of chilled elf berry lemonade in her hand was sweltering.' What? WTF is that supposed to mean? As written it is just a confusing pile of poop! Please explain, and/or correct that sentence. Ciao. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Why not finish this one I really want to know how it ends please |
![]() ![]() ![]() One of the best stories I have ever read. Hope you are able to finish it. Keep up the great work! |