So far I have found this story hilarious and am sad that it has been discontinued. If you ever started writing more of this I would be very excited but as it is I will simply enjoy what you have written so far. I look forward to seeing what happens when the king awakens. I find the personality you have given Jian hilarious. Good luck and may your inspiration be as constant as the Sun and Moon.

I don't care about the knight's life. But if you blindly follow orders and blindly take in hate, and you ACT upon it, you deserve to be hunted down. At best, make them a slave and give them 10 whip per person each month for x amount of years. At worst, you execute them as a warning to others.

I say cripple them for them and then put them as slaves in a labor work where if they dont meet their quota, they get extremely punished and the cycle continues till they die. That'll teach everyone, especially people with power, on being stupid mindless sheep.

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Naofumi is the definition of carried. He’s the guy that joins your raid and stands in the boss attacks, then complains about not getting heals.

I quite enjoyed this story and was rather disappointed to see it end on a cliffhanger. Good job and here's hoping you someday feel moved to continue it.

It was awesome. Too bad it's dead/

This is funny

huh? these missing weapons were supposed to be a joke? given the fact how that husky demi obviously had a hate boner for Shirou all logic dictated that this was supposed to be setup for some cliché powerplay done by their army against Shirou's party and this Shirou strangely being Shirou deciding to let them go. without any consequences... I guess that sometimes I think too much :/

Damm I hope Shirou's traced weapons vanish over time here, because otherwise him not being even slighly annoyed by these demihumans stealing all of his projected weapons would be really annoying...

This sucks. Just being nice about it but it's not appealing sorry. 0/10

Man this was a really nice read, it’s a shame that it’s retired. But I hope you get back to this story again some day.

….wow, I really do not like this version of Shirou. Guy just seems like an asshole honestly…no, to be more exact, more like somebody with Shirou’s backstory and looks yet has a very different personality?

“He wasn't holding any kind of weapon or artifact, so Shirou felt pretty confident that at his current distance of just over forty feet, he could take the man down before he had time to cast a spell.”

*cough* Staff Hero *cough*

Bruh. That’s so stupid. Give the guy the cursed series, and then never use it?! That’s such a damn waste. At that point, why even add such a thing?

Continuing my first point, this Shirou is *way* too damn suspicious of others. Guy is paranoia multiplied a hundred times over. Like, Jesus Christ Shirou. God, I doubt more and more this’ll be a great read…

What the fuck you do know that zeltrech would stomp flitoria right not only can he also manipulate time and space but also casualty and fate not to mention he's an outerversal threat himself

…Oh dear. That backfired quickly. Stupid Archer bad luck…

You don't adjust to a timebomb. Canon was incredibly clear on what that arm was going to do whether Shirou lived calmly or used it repeatedly. 10 years, 10 days, or 10 hours, it was absolutely going to destroy his brain and leave him in a vegetative state.

Normally, I don't reply to author notes, but this particular instance was the straw breaking the camel's back. You repeatedly break the conventions of "show, don't tell" by justifying your every left-field decision at almost every chapter up to this point. It also cements my thoughts into one specific conclusion: You're wasting your time with fanfic. Go find an editor and start turning out original manuscripts.

You have a more than decent writing style, although you practice a frequent habit of getting lost in minutia that, if removed from the story, would affect very, very little. But reading this and your others stories, it's noted that you consistently battle with the created works, obviously preferring your own pathways and setups to whatever the canon has dictated, whether that's to the story's strength or to it's detriment.

I think you'd seriously have a good shot at making it in a serial format if you break away from fanfic and just create your own works from scratch. Given the weight of reviews you have on hand, it would land you a following and a start into novel profitability.

Anyways, cheers.