Reviews for Monkey or Charlotte? The Rubber Pirate |
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![]() ![]() Please continue this story |
![]() ![]() Pls updaTe more |
![]() ![]() ![]() I didn’t know you till 2 days ago but I’m happy that your father is fine. Congratulations |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey! Luffy and 'Uncle Katakuri' as Luffy calls him are twins now! |
![]() ![]() ![]() If I was you, I would stop writing for a while until the situation is fixed. Sorry for everything, hoping this mess will be fixed |
![]() ![]() ![]() Idea for a fairy tail fic Spriggan tail-after Zeref helped Mavis create fairy tail I came to the conclusion that there would always be darkness in the world no matter what. So in order to fend off future catastrophe. He forms a secret sect within fairy tail known as spriggan tail only known to its own members. Their job?, to control and manipulate the darkness that has such a grasp of ishgar whole remaining hidden within fiore and fairy tail. But soon they will not be able to hide much longer soon there members will rise up and take there place as the ultimate dark guild. Must have certain members of fairy tail as secret members of spriggan tail. Can also change some stories to have whoever you want. Must have either mirajane or erza |
![]() ![]() Only 4 chapters? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great kick-off my friend. |
![]() ![]() ![]() seriously brulee why her there are much more better ones |
![]() ![]() ![]() I kind of don't like how you portrayed Big Mom here. Her reaction is way too focused on the fact Dragon hurt her daughter. The other things you mentioned, insulting Big Mom, and stealing from her, would be far more prevalent. Even the fact he hurt her daughter would anger her more from the fact that in doing so he was acting against her crew, not so much the fact that her daughter is actually hurting. To put it more simply, she's too nice. That's not Big Mom. And her family isn't one big happy crew. Some of them see eachother fondly, but others don't really care about each other. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Fun! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Maybe a bit too hastened and simple, but otherwise very enjoyable just as their first canon meeting was. If I may give some more advices, remind this is a written story and therefore you have to describe more the various scenes, by the setting to the other people around and more, so that us readers can do a more accurate description of all. It will also be more helpful when it comes to fights. Good work. |
![]() ![]() ![]() keep up the amazing work! |
![]() ![]() ![]() jump to the main story and have flashbacks. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Stay safe meanwhile and pm me if and whe you update. |