Reviews for U Don't Even Know Who I Am
alanisjunkie chapter 1 . 11/11/2003
i like this. keep working at it
Alyx7 chapter 1 . 7/29/2003
It's good, pretty funny-a bit more spastic than the more recent eppys (the ones sans Sister Brenda) but it did fit with the characters, didn't rub 'em the wrong way too bad...About Sister Brenda's absence, I have no idea what's up with that, she and Lucia were each in the first 12 eps and then they vanished (although, if you go to the NBC homepage for the show, the IN QOUTES qoute that's currently up is 'I have to fire a part-time nun and convince a cubin woman to stop feeding plantains to her dog.' So, it's plausible (okay-probable) that Jake fired Brenda, told Lucia to stop feeding her dog plantains, and Lucia got mad and quit-whether over Brenda getting fired or the plantains and her dog-I don't know). Interestingly enough, I don't think the producers wanted either character to stay on the show. BTW, Tiffani-Amber Theissin'll be on the show for a three eppy arc this fall.

Anyway, back to the fic. For future fics (or chapters), it might be a good idea to separate the dialogue by character so it's easier for the readers to follow.
surfur chapter 1 . 5/6/2003
Not bad, not bad for a first timer. OK, here's a suggestion for a better story: Penny goes to get her job back after she quit... and it's too late. Jake has already re-hired this new woman. Penny is broken... even further. Why, why, WHY?

She goes to Jake's house, angry and hurt. She decides to confront him... tell him everything... no more keeping everyhthing bottled up while she tries to hold down the cork. If Jake says no, fine. But she can't sit on her feelings one more minute...

She busts in there and is pereparing to tell him when... she sees he's packing his things and planning to leave the show.. and Miami... and her... forever. A new job in a new city. In another country.

Penny can't take this one more second. Just as he plans to walk out the door and out of her life forever, she blocks the door with her body and says
surfur chapter 1 . 5/6/2003
Not bad, not bad for a first timer. OK, here's a suggestion for a better story: Penny goes to get her job back after she quit... and it's too late. Jake has already re-hired this new woman. Penny is broken... even further. Why, why, WHY?

She goes to Jake's house, angry and hurt. She decides to confront him... tell him everything... no more keeping everyhthing bottled up while she tries to hold down the cork. If Jake says no, fine. But she can't sit on her feelings one more minute...

She busts in there and is pereparing to tell him when... she sees he's packing his things and planning to leave the show.. and Miami... and her... forever. A new job in a new city. In another country.

Penny can't take this one more second. Just as he plans to walk out the door and out of her life forever, she blocks the door with her body and says
Jewl chapter 1 . 4/26/2003
I like it. It was actually pretty good for your first GM,M fic. I have a question though- You called the woman Wanda, but then you called her Carla twice. Typo, i think. Anyway, it was good.