Firstly thank you for the chapter and story.

I just found this story after reading "Harry Potter and the Illithid Inquisition", and the writing quality is just as good as your most recent story.

But I got to say that the dialogue was an absolute slog to get through, but it never seemed out of place, and, really helped to develop and flesh out all the characters.

The motivations and arguments really sold the idea that these are really people, that have the own perspectives, opinions and history, that shapes how they behave and interact with each other.

If you ever decide to continue this story, perhaps you could a combination of outside perspectives (council predominately) with what ever is going with the MC.

Also I would note, its not necessary to tell us everything going on, just showing us some of the events in action can do at least half the explaining of story.

Regardless I can say this story is the more interesting to me of the two stories of yours I have now read, the potential feels larger, the story feels bigger, the universe provides are larger canvas to explore and the stakes are much greater.

Thanks for the story it was a great read!

Please please please continue this story, you are cooking with jet fuel with this one

Is this story going to continue?

I do hope you come back to this, this is one of the best fanfics I have seen about mass effect so far.
Also have a good day wordsmith.

The council’s subtle ingrained arrogance in this chapter is peak mass effect.

Zaeed was betrayed by Vido in 2165, eleven years before the assault on Elysium happened in 2176. This is mentioned in the Blue Suns wik entry and not Zaeeds personal wiki page.

More? Please?

definitely one of the best out there. shame it's not being updated any more

keep up the good work and I hope you continue this story

Honestly you dont give this chapter enough credit, especially that Saren scene. Best characterized Saren ive ever seen and the character growth for some of the others was awesome. Really hope you pick this up one day

Found the betamale femboy primarch.

I hope that this will be updated at some point

PLEASE, for the love of the Emperor, learn how to use commas to better dictate the flow and rhythm of speech, and then fix some spelling issues and typos...and this would be a GREAT story.
It's being held back by such tiny things. The story and dialogue are both -for the most part- very good! Just learn how to use punctuation to improve rhythm, and the story can really shine.

This chapter clears up several questions I had from the last chapter. This will be a VERY interesting story to read, if it continues as well as it's started!

I had to read the big spoilery explanation for how this AU functions a few times before I got it all, but...it checks out. Except for the Terra-centered humans never bothering to take element zero and bring it back to Terra and the Sol system.
This would be WAY simpler and cleaner if you had just separated the two galaxies and had it so Primarch Shepherd is flung all the way into the neighboring galaxy, which we find out is the Mass Effect galaxy. I assume you chose not to do that because you wanted to get the Reapers involved with the 40k side of things later on in the story...I fear for the coherency of the story at that point, but hey, who knows what awaits me later on.

So far, the story is surprisingly well-written! Very good! Only a few spelling errors and occasional clunky line of disjointed dialogue.