Kann Jon nicht mal nein ! Die arrogante margaery mit Jon ist groan.

This story does have potential, but it is everywhere. For example one chapter Sansa is persuading the Vale to aid the river men, the next one she has just escaped king's landing. Also it would of made more sense for Maester Aemon to tell him his heritage than Howland saying infront of everyone. Overall I wouldn't recommend this fanfic. 2/10.

Rubbish not finished but still crap

A female heir and the blooodline dies, horrible ending since luckily this didn’t happen my head cannon is that the baby was a boy, Melisandre’s stupid prophesy never happened and there is a male heir to the Throne keeping the Targaryen name and bloodline alive.

Ok a female Kingsguard is stupi making Arya one is even worse…

Ok this is stupid. First Jon should have destroyed Locke. Second the Attack wouldn’t have worked 3.000 Freys coming out of nowhere wouldn’t have been able to match Robb’s Northmen even if somehow they managed to ambush them unless most of his force was made up of Boltons but even still he should have taken too few men and no Freys somehow I find that hard to believe.

Die Paarung Jon/Margaery macht eine ansonsten großartige Geschichte kaputt.

Thanks for the summary!
I would have hope that Jon would have survive, he deserved it

I was really liking the treatment of the relationship between Jon and Margary, you're good at that. Instead of continuing with what the series did you would have chosen to just follow the development of the relationship between Jon and Margary towards a happy ending (and the interactions of other characters as well, it's one of the few fics where it's entertaining to read). I appreciate what you did, have you ever read the books, have you ever thought about how a relationship between Jon and Melisandre or Jon and Val would look like?

Great Story.I don't like Margaery/Jon.

Complete my fucking ass. I should have known better than to keep reading when you put in a preface bashing anyone who liked your work here after the fact...

Don't worry, though. This story won't keep my from reading your apparently brilliant and evolved later stories. Your handling of this story however? Yeah, that will.

The worst ending, it seems that it complies with being from GoT

You're a lazy, incompetent loser. I hope your life sucks.

brain dead monkey

I don't like Jon with Dany or Margaery.