The first impression for a serious writer's perspective review: This is a really creative premise. If you were to turn in a book script with everything as it is, it wouldn't be accepted, but you would definitely get eyebrows; the standard novel isn't exactly close to your staggering amount of material. For people who like to seriously read fanfiction, this comes across as a winner for someone who likes's to read like they watch Netflix series. Because this is written like a series would be.

If Harry learns to cast color change charms with his breath, and gets good enough... could he do a technicolor yawn?

I wonder which school has better food, Hogwarts or the Unseen University? ;)

This has been such a delightful story to read over the last couple of weeks - I've really enjoyed your creative take on the magical world! I think my favourite bit has been seeing the "slow" parts of Harry's life in between all the excitement, and I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next!

Why does he have glasses? hes a dragon?

Is Harry invincible to the killing curse? It would bounce off of him and if voldemort gets it between his eyes then it will not work because of Lilly

so... is the liquid silver thingamajig going to be like a 3d globe Marauders Map that goes all the way to the moon? I didn't quite get the idea of what it's intended shape was

These kids have been spending too much time around Dumbledore. XD And Snape's reaction to the map is A-plus. XD
Awesome job! :D

Is disgusted of Uxbridge actually Umbridge?

but he didn't quit randomly. he announced at his first dinner at the castle that his contract would end two months before the end of the school year to avoid possibly making the jinx target him.

I think you mean TYLER kept informing people, not Tiara

but isn't it a 'bubblehead' charm not a 'bubblesquirrel' charm? a squirrel may be smaller but the magic should still only target the head, which means a smaller bubble to match a smaller head.

I didn’t think I’d like this story, but you’re doing a lovely job so far. The concept of dragon Harry being a book wyrm fills me with delight. And he likes Terry Pratchett! He has excellent taste.

how is Sally short for Sarah? they're the exact same length both in spelling and, know importantly, in speaking.

what does being a protocol droid have to do with being made of gold?