" pur files.." sod breaking that they'd be in her ship.

"ONI was planning to.." halsey was a large part of that, which he, the genius soldier, conveniently forgets and fails to discern.

" fire of hope..fight against tyranny..." too naive as a leader.

" lost cause.." holds most population and industry. And he's only confirmed 2 of the over 5 different national factions.

" deprive ONI of fuel.." ONI has the facilities, not them. They'd run out first before they destroy enough transports.

"..tactical nuke.." under 10 kilotons only possible if the round is dropped vertically. It'd still wipe out cities.

" dangerous line...human beings..." emergency governing powers were a thing they had and evidently misused, directly and otherwise. NO ONE in that room deserves to make such choices and they're all smart enough to know it.

" cabinet..constitution.." assigned teams would do so not just him. Too many nuances.

" reduce the power...bureaucracy, checks.." main UEG issue was the senate's slow politics and CMA freedom.

Good note on Turians. Good story overall.

Hood's actions are rather idiotic. He incited all of human space into civil war without finding out if ONI acted first on any other planet. Poorly handled outcome; why would Strauss believe Hood's data? Why did ONI use the VERY expensive and time consuming probe launcher over building its own comm buoy network, that you alluded to when you first introduced them? They have the ships and it's cheaper and efficient. Just too much leading without enough supporting reason.

Good showing for Nazara. Disturbing implications in its indoctrination. Hope Onyx's sentinels have subroutines to track it should it escape.

Good sequence and flow. Reaper looks about to escape if it triggered the aggresssors

"..from a subversive.." too much asskissing. He'd note that they aren't trained for indirect wetwork.

"..racist.." speciesist.

"...Far Isle...two kilometres...dreams..kicked..." suspense was largely lost with her repeated irrationalities but good enough.

Good pace. Nice horror, though dubious that the reaper would have only a door lock keeping it in contained.

" kill every.." most of their code only applies to asari jurisdictions. Beyond it, they acknowledge other governments' authorities. This is a sore point. A lot about justicars evidently glossed.

Good presentation of S2s.

Good chapter. Getting 40k horus heresy and founding vibes.

Prelate review; only experience determines what can happen in nature. And nature is virtually limitless in what it can enable.
Disposable weapons; or just focus on EMP-modified or harder hitting rounds? You're forcing a lot of logistical and governing changes when easier alternatives are present. From entire ship redesigns, to gun mechanics, to the geopolitical changes that Orlenda's making, etc. It's been less than 3 years since the coalition started.

How is whitcomb still on the Council with his demeanor and attitude? Why hasn't he been trialed or removed? Most of his showings so far are rather sod breaking as he's VERY obviously unstable.

Parangosky's apparent interest and focus in making the UNSC the most capable military also a sore point. Why exactly would she do that, it doesn't secure human survival, only pushes them towards and against the turians. And apparently every Coalition leader can very easily conclude and at times, preclude, that she's a basic bitch. Why would they even care about human internal affairs to that extent? Her talk with Tevos has little political expression. Mostly basic manipulation that any civilian can learn from psychology. Same for Tevos talk with Hood.

Orlenda choosing irrationally, reparations from an already crippled world, in civil war no less, over the likelihood of human extinction by the next year by Xytan is another sore point. At this point I only see likely indoctrination, like Whitcomb.

ONI has no section 5. Section 3 handles research.

" we want...by all rights.." more irrationality.

"..reasonable.." it isn't due to how it started. He'd see that as much as he sees her malice.

" match ships with the Covenant.." didn't they get info that they're currently fighting non-combat oriented ships from Zhoist? Warships matching civilian-analogue ships? They can't just rise by about 40x effectiveness all over, going by Cole's first battle.

" stripped of weapons." Dubious that they'd even know what they look like or where they'd likely be.

Tevos being apparently the shadow ruler of the republics with just the broker's support alone, another sore point. Her alone vs every other matriach?
Aethyta's position is good and well supported though. Suppsoe it balances out.

"It's a bluff.." no basis, very unlikely. He didn't specify how many children would die. He can raze a few worlds. He's politically correct and that makes his threat more paramount.

" even our odds.." they know the execution fleets have some basis in reality. A few dozen ships does not even any odds.

" took the trade ship.." and no one else raised a fuss? When they have a joint research endeavour group?

" advice for.." reacted to a fact everyone should know about salarians by then.

No mid point in most interactions and comparisons. Switching between relative extremes; Turian overreach vs. Turian sop, UNSC oversight vs UNSC laxity. Others are good so far.

" before or after..." how does any government intel agency screw up this bad? That's a VERY big tell.

" well disposed towards..." idiot ball on using actual open ONI affiliates/members as local heads.

" a weakness..." not a weakness. They didn't check the code before activating? Idiot move. Moreso on halsey.

"Damn it..." odd of her not to expect such a move.

" discovered these.." replaced discretely? Are the buoys unprotected?

" rouge state.." not seeing why they're so keen on this. Being preventive would likely be enough. They already have the UNSC economically subdued, have the covenant backtracking and covenant tech samples to work on. Why would they care over who rules humanity(internal affairs) when they still have the most effective cards over it; resources, numbers, economy, industry? Stg yes, others why? Distance alone is a big limiter to ONI expansion and travel.

"Charum Hakkor..." translation?

Excellent history take. Very formative and logical. Especially monikers. Hope they find a monitor to clear things up.

" if we settle it with refugees..." you're really stretching the refugee crisis. In canon, it was mainly due to the rapid loss of worlds. Here, it's a stable-ish front. Plus all the already destroyed colonies, even at 5 billion refugees, 1 garden world is more than enough for all. Easier logistics to support occupation and growth into a self sufficient colony.

How far is the planet? Even with relays, schedules, piracy rates and distances may largely hinder effective logistics, which hinders everything else in turn.

" Infinity would..." how come they're still designing it? Why not narrow goal to species continuity, given its cost and present situation? Do the imports offset this enough to still be viable? If so, any changes or expansions?

" second Reach..." big exaggeration.

"twenty trillion..." how much value is in a credit? doesn't seem like much considering shepard's rough 4 billion cost.

" non-lethal.." rather naive to ask and near improbable given point in time, likely actions and goals involved.

"Far Isle..." dubious that it'd still be used as a reference given the near non-impact it had on the civil war. Plus likely a UNSC Officer corp training/recruitment issue over an ONI one.

" without the long term effects...prone to systemic corruption" near impossible given human nature and Murphy. All members there would know that main catalysts were no ftl comm. and CMA, both of which have been dealt with.

" excise the parts...rise of...weaken our ability..." open lie and no one's noticing it?

" corporate structures...colonial instability..." only for outer colonies. Inner colonies was mostly rebel sympathy and reaction to UNSC indiscrimination. Plus huge risk of spiralling to affect production given corporate sourced unsc equipment.

" and the UEG senate.." minority.

" indecision.." largely from not getting up to date info.

" repeat of before.." is whitcomb indoctrinated? Seems like it given his flawed opinions.

" megacorporations.." will definitely cripple production. Was a near constant exacerbated by CMA corruption and no ftl comm to update UEG.

"...firing squad...extrajudicial..." bit of a leap.

" senate disbanded...support of.." very presumptuous of them to discuss politics at the moment. Easier to postpone till after colony reclamation's complete.

" martial law so we.." UEG gave it governing powers, martial law's different.

" cliques form...pre-war political..." then you survive by talking or fighting, or both, as you have for the past 400 years. He's VERY vocal.

" left of the..." all senate members died? The bureaucrats and government agencies that went to UNSC control? Easily contestable.

" on their boards..majority stake..." too aggrsssive, no solid reason in wartime for it, backlash too large of a risk. Also easy to circumvent by boxing unsc sales as revenge and focusing on citadel markets.

" planetary governments do nothing..." in the largely UEG loyal and stable inner colonies?

" build cities...infrastructure..." he would know the objective differences. Same reason army engineers aren't in civilian work.

" substandard..." pissing off the military is something anyone with a good brain isn't likely to do, moreso as a business.

" political and corporate.." may work long term if they get turian advisors and sell it well to civilians; like rephrasing mentions of social restrictions. Would be more comparable to ancient humans ironically.

" new world the Turians..." movement of prominent people easily noticeable and preventable/adapted to. Also too close to front line to put high profile figures. Very obvious.

" colonize..." radiation issues. Infinity was meant as its own colony, not a colonizer.

"ONI would die..." likely has continuity backups in place.

" deals with..." very bold given internal affairs. Comes off as overly desperate. Overused at the moment.

" and philanthropic..." would likely start with turians. Salarian politics a noted factor, asari unlikely to interfere, unless large caveat and risk to them; internal affair.

" power base..." that'd take decades to make let alone exploit. Why not support and leverage on section 0? It's near depletion was partly how Parangosky got carte blanche. Section 1 also has navy overlaps he may tap with stg help as he focuses on 0.

Good pace.

" voice broke..." unlikely. Sorrowful tone and sad expression usually enough of a standard.

" at 20.00" which planet's time?

Good take on Roselynn.

ONI came after the ueg not before.

Why would other agency names be wiped from history? Given their common reputations at the time, it'd be near possible and not worth doing for the sake of fearmongering alone.

" shadowy ruler" only postwar.

" small and insignificant..." citadel space is not just asari, slarians and turians. Past those 3, ONI largely lacks experience, which they would know and hence not have attempted their omega setup without first getting an actual picture of at least the politics in the region.

" how nobody had done so..." and not asking herself why? The SU likely already knew and had contingencies given their niche and how easy it was for shepard and liara to find kechlu, with the cerberus data. Broker survives majorly by proving to be more useful than detrimental to most of his clients.

" equal player" she's smart and practical, not delusional.

" promoted... to me" promoted for what outstanding act? Why get involved, after discovering possible intel leaks?

" compromised" only the citadel buoys. They are used to having no ftl comms. you know?

" crack our decryption..." happens commonly, among every intel agency. That's why the keys and schemes regularly change and update. It's standard.

" be challenging..." use a prowler as bus service? Much slower but still more secure.

" lowest possible.." nothing to compare to given 0 prior experience. Just settle for cash.

" grow our efforts.. pre-emptively...foreign intelligence..." most roles present, in different focuses, in sections 2 and 1 in overlaps.

" attempts to..." dead drop with a prowler? Entire terminus region to choose from.

" blocking...export..." the longterm economic results of the security council's long-winded speech on not caring about debt and tech exchanges.

" construction and..." why use people over automation?

" trainers... close quarters..." unlikely to yield useful results. Very different biologies that lead to different techniques. Against a stronger melee enemy, why not work to create and keep range. If they get close, why not make more powerful shotguns, as someone likely fucked up?

" low-level garrison..." aren't the turians already doing that effectively?

Why go for slaves over automation that presently exists?

Why would she explain her reasonings to mithras?

" human labor needed..." with present refugee concerns, most of those colonies being outposts or remote mining centres and the expected baby boom post war, that's impossible. 2 million can occupy 200 worlds in 20k batches.

" has agreed..." without investigation, deliberation or any form of consideration?

" five different pieces...one time deal and..." most logical decision by far.

" dies in her sleep.." too obvious to any intel agency or military body.

" signed the kill order..." that can be accessed by another should its storage be compromised. An illegal, unofficial assassination, having a direct paperwork trail?

" disliked Halsey..." long rant without elaborating on why she dislikes her.

Why such a vested interest in Onyx? It borders obsession beyond her capacity.

This ONI is definitely Traviss. Sad that, and curious why you chose that depiction.

Broker introduction was rather pointless. Even as a statement. Why would he bother?

Aria setting ground rules just after highlights Broker rivalry more than her power. Why didn't she do so when they arrived? Another near pointless act.

Where is it said that Omega's eezo is the largest deposit? If it were, it'd be taken and owned by the Citadel, not left for Terminus factions.

Swinging along extremes here; at this point ONI members come off as idiotically irrational and the Broker an undisputed observer and procurer.

Why would a field station report directly to CINCONI? Why would they attempt to introduce AI with different and easily noticeable digital architectures into foreign systems? Why are they expecting to find government dirt on backwaters and public sites? Why would they go through the extra steps of giving up the prisoners to Collectors over shooting them and torching? Or dropping their bodies near a star? Or any other more credible and logical means? To attain a near unattainable goal? Citadel species not trading corpses for collector technology implies a lot against ONI doing it, minus their dispositions.

Why would the Broker highlight himself so openly over simply proxying himself as a very ludicrous client? A single intel drop would be more than enough to intice ONI and he has more than enough muscle to use when it inevitably tries to strike at him.

"...control over AI..." what about the morning war highlighted that as an actual solution? Geth evolution was a near fluke due to adaptive networking. Quarian attempts to control them led to their fall.

"...without Rampancy..." what threat? The override commands would still be present and other security AI would still be present to act if needed.

"..banning of all..." did he just read an extranet article/blog on the morning war? Sounds like it if this is his opinion.

"self-determinate..." Only rampancy or overrides would make them go past restrictive codes.

"AI uprising.." what for? Risk all of humanity to perpetuate a presently weak opinion?

This ONI's more Traviss than Nylund, with the near crack it implies. Reasoning and perspectives almost completely discarded to emphasize "ONI bad".

how did Kirrahe get the clearance to use the engine room monitor for the copying, given standard procedure and the system changes being made? Dubious that he was granted system access.

Ha! Elite reaper's a tech priest.

"bat the projectile" why did it wait for him to arm and throw it? Why didn't it use its guns to detonate it? plot armor showing.

"no heavy weapons..." the pelicans.

"ripping the chaingun..." or he could get in the cockpit, or more likely have someone else do it, and fire it from there?

the arc's big brother and slipspace-exploiting reapers.

Great chapter. Nice seeing the reapers making actual use of their age.

Well done.
Looks like the warp has been breached.