Reviews for Trip Down a Hill |
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melikereading chapter 1 . 7/26 The character building of this story is wonderful, with everyone being part of the story rather than being a part of Naruto’s story. The gripe that I have though is the names; its very small part but it breaks the immersion with Western Names in a Ninja themed story. |
Shikamaru's babygirl chapter 1 . 4/14 GREAT first chapter. I'm loving their friendship already! Considering how nice Naruto felt about being acknowledged after answering Iruka's question, maybe he'll try to study theory a bit more now hahah. Sasuke could be of great help. |
beahliezl.marasigan chapter 100 . 3/28 So, i read this under 1 1/2 days, sue me. Kudos to youuuu. |
Ninja 909 chapter 1 . 2/5 great story |
Guest chapter 17 . 1/1 666’th review, also, this shit is fucking fire, rereading it rn |
Darkeous chapter 57 . 12/7/2023 this shit is fye |
Srw chapter 100 . 2/17/2023 Thank you for the original story. I very much enjoyed it. |
mrjordanriver chapter 100 . 1/30/2023 Hi, I just consumed your fanfiction in a week and I must say that it is skilled writing. I agree with a lot of the critiques you said but that didn't stop me from finishing. I would also add that style at writing relationships is and genuine and how every relationship ideally should be. and that might be a weakness you have. Even the bad ones ended well. Oh calms down and dropped their problems in a natural ways. But I admit that such things are welcome occurrences in fantasy genre. How there was a cost to the friendship and that everyone was willing to pay it. I love that this Naruto wasn't as strong as the Canon one and yet his friendships made everything end up okay. Like maybe you should have had an epilogue of Itachi's funeral. But everything you wrote is in essence beautiful. Admit you definitely splattered some messes throughout. that's what makes your relationships so genuine. people can love each other in real life and things still might not work out. and I love that about your writing. Thank you for writing. |
mrjordanriver chapter 100 . 1/30/2023 Hi, I just consumed your fanfiction in a week and I must say that it is skilled writing. I agree with a lot of the critiques you said but that didn't stop me from finishing. I would also add that style at writing relationships is and genuine and how every relationship ideally should be. and that might be a weakness you have. Even the bad ones ended well. Oh calms down and dropped their problems in a natural ways. But I admit that such things are welcome occurrences in fantasy genre. How there was a cost to the friendship and that everyone was willing to pay it. I love that this Naruto wasn't as strong as the Canon one and yet his friendships made everything end up okay. I wish you would have ended on more of a sour note because you seem like somebody who enjoys Hallmark series. |
KyoTheSlime chapter 4 . 1/18/2023 the man in front of him raised him head? ya made a small mistake. it should be the man in front of him raised his head instead. )! |
Dacoldest chapter 100 . 12/6/2022 Fantastic story. Stumbled upon it searching for a team 7 friends fic. This really embodied that. This is one of my all time great stories. I especially like that you didnt overpower Naruto and Sasuke with KCM and EMS. Let it hang out there as future growth. It's not perfect, but I really truly enjoyed this. nothing I love more than a well-written, long story that veers off of the main rails. |
Theworldsweakest chapter 34 . 8/17/2022 I really enjoyed the idea of this story. That being said somethings that made me drop was calling the Toad summons frogs constantly even with Jiraiya correcting them once and then even calling them frogs himself later on. Also the fact that one of the Sound ninja’s names were Dale and one of the Sand’s named Candice. Seeing such western names really broke the immersion and I couldn’t continue after that. I loved the ideas and story premise but couldn’t get past those things. |
Drax152 chapter 29 . 7/15/2022 Oh ho? I'm not through the whole chapter yet, but is thia foreshadowing of Team 7 getting some training from Hiruzen? |
Drax152 chapter 16 . 7/14/2022 Naruto "Get Your Shit Together" Uzumaki |
Drax152 chapter 10 . 7/14/2022 "...he put 2 and 2 together. and got 8" Oh my god that's gold. |