Thank you for the original story. I very much enjoyed it.

Hi, I just consumed your fanfiction in a week and I must say that it is skilled writing. I agree with a lot of the critiques you said but that didn't stop me from finishing. I would also add that style at writing relationships is and genuine and how every relationship ideally should be. and that might be a weakness you have. Even the bad ones ended well. Oh calms down and dropped their problems in a natural ways. But I admit that such things are welcome occurrences in fantasy genre. How there was a cost to the friendship and that everyone was willing to pay it. I love that this Naruto wasn't as strong as the Canon one and yet his friendships made everything end up okay. Like maybe you should have had an epilogue of Itachi's funeral. But everything you wrote is in essence beautiful. Admit you definitely splattered some messes throughout. that's what makes your relationships so genuine. people can love each other in real life and things still might not work out. and I love that about your writing.
Thank you for writing.

Hi, I just consumed your fanfiction in a week and I must say that it is skilled writing. I agree with a lot of the critiques you said but that didn't stop me from finishing. I would also add that style at writing relationships is and genuine and how every relationship ideally should be. and that might be a weakness you have. Even the bad ones ended well. Oh calms down and dropped their problems in a natural ways. But I admit that such things are welcome occurrences in fantasy genre. How there was a cost to the friendship and that everyone was willing to pay it. I love that this Naruto wasn't as strong as the Canon one and yet his friendships made everything end up okay. I wish you would have ended on more of a sour note because you seem like somebody who enjoys Hallmark series.

the man in front of him raised him head? ya made a small mistake.
it should be
the man in front of him raised his head instead. )!

Fantastic story. Stumbled upon it searching for a team 7 friends fic. This really embodied that. This is one of my all time great stories. I especially like that you didnt overpower Naruto and Sasuke with KCM and EMS. Let it hang out there as future growth. It's not perfect, but I really truly enjoyed this. nothing I love more than a well-written, long story that veers off of the main rails.

I really enjoyed the idea of this story. That being said somethings that made me drop was calling the Toad summons frogs constantly even with Jiraiya correcting them once and then even calling them frogs himself later on. Also the fact that one of the Sound ninja’s names were Dale and one of the Sand’s named Candice. Seeing such western names really broke the immersion and I couldn’t continue after that. I loved the ideas and story premise but couldn’t get past those things.

Oh ho? I'm not through the whole chapter yet, but is thia foreshadowing of Team 7 getting some training from Hiruzen?

Naruto "Get Your Shit Together" Uzumaki

"...he put 2 and 2 together. and got 8" Oh my god that's gold.

This is some good writing. Finally, some good freakin food!

Such a great ending to the story. I especially liked what you did with the hill at the end and everyone gathering around. It felt very nostalgic for me.

I will say, quite cheesy here and there lol but all is fine. Hope you continue writing and have fun!

I'm confused now. Earlier it said Naruto and Jiraiya traveled outside the village to get to pain and that Zetsu teleported to them to get the Gedo statue. Then the gang came over to assist, and now it says they tore up the Training Ground 3 field?

It's interesting to see how forgiving a lot of the characters are in this. It might be a bit too forgiving, especially with Tsunade willing to grant full pardon and the jazz.

It also seems, to me at least, that some of the pacing here and there speeds up quickly then slows back down.

Having multiple, more than 5, characters in the same room while carrying a conversation is a difficult thing to do and not make it awkward but I feel as if you did a decent enough job with it so good job.

It's interesting to see how forgiving a lot of the characters are in this. It might be a bit too forgiving, especially with Tsunade willing to grant full pardon and the jazz.

It also seems, to me at least, that some of the pacing here and there speeds up quickly then slows back down.

Having multiple, more than 5, characters in the same room while carrying a conversation is a difficult thing to do and not make it awkward but I feel as if you did a decent enough job with it so good job.

So they really sent a group of Chunin after two S class ninja instead of actual Jonin? Why tho. And the nine-tails jinchuriki as well? What part of that makes sense ?