great prologue

This fic is example of being creatively dead

You did'nt watch the series haven't you?

Nice work I look forward to more

Make chapter 2 please

this feels like futaro cosplaying as a wack ass Naruto, no offense.

i knew it

when there is some seasonal waifu
there must be naruto replace the MC

always like that
and i don't care if you new or veteran at this but you must know there already much story like this

seriously you just copy paste from anime

i bet you don't even read the manga and this story will be rushing like the nakano's get bullied naruto fight the bullie and they love him

tada you got naruto

...

BOO

So, you pretty much just replaced Futaro and subbed in Naruto. I didn’t read the whole thing, is Futaro even in this story? Lmao you deadass erased this man out his own story. Anyway, you could’ve just- say,

Naruto becomes Futaro's tutor or something, or maybe just a friend of one of the Quints or something, who the hell knows. I would’ve read that or whatever other idea you had over just basically copying and pasting a Naruto in as Futaro. Not to mention, Naruto's a dumbass. Lol wtf is he gonna teach anyone?

JAJAJA, CUANDO APRENDERAN A NO LLAMAR A CUALQUIER FIC UN CRUCE, QUE NO ES NARUTO, SOLO EL PROTAGONISTA CON UN DISFRAZ DE NARUTO.

I hope you countinue this...

So you took Fuutarou, dyed his hair blonde and made him as cliche as any Naruto is? Well, that's one way of doing it.

Seriously though, let's uonack this one. We have another boring 'Loner but Cool' Naruto instead of actually interesting character.

Your attempt to differentiate him from Fuutarou seemed okay until you butted in with that dumb 'bouncer and journalist' bit. I mean, really, I can already imagine how dumb and cliche it will go down later.

You should rewrite.

Well... when you warped up the story like this, it's feels kinda normal, no punchline ok.
Seem interesting for noe. Alot of typo and wrong in there but it's nice new crossover.

I would suggest taking a little time after writing it to skim and fix a few errors but other than that it’s a good start. ~

Great so far, I look forward to reading more in the future.

good story but for me you need to make naruto's personality to more baddass and kind at the same time