This story is a mess.

Okay, i have to ask, are you using google translate for this? Or is english your second language? Because if not, your grammar is horrible and either way you need a beta. The typos and grammatical errors run what is otherwise a pretty decent story. Find a beta!

Man, you have shit grammar.

Despite its flaws, I enjoyed this story overall and hope it gets finished one day.

Jon can be a real ass sometimes.

What happened to the grammar? Suddenly it took a steep turn for the worse. Did your beta stop or something?

Why... is he still called Jon Snow? It doesn’t make any sense. I second this question.

Even if lord Ashara was supposed to have a child with was Northman, the child would still be called Jon Sand. It just screams "We are hiding a secret about this child". Ugh.

His...was the msstupir chapter ever written. You make the opposition too overpowered. Every time they act they succeed, and its hard to read.

Will you continue the story?

this is arguably one of the worst fics I have ever read. for one with 200K words, the plot doesn't go anywhere and the story is really difficult to follow thanks to terrible grammar

How do his grey almost black eyes remind Arthur of rhaegar who had the classic valyrian features

In your Ghardaq section, you have two paragraphs in a row that are repeating. It starts "Gagdara," he said, still smiling.

Rhaella has a top tier MILF/GILF booty. Overall fantastic story so far, keep up the good writing.

Why... is he still called Jon Snow? It doesn’t make any sense.

An update is finally out! I checked almost every day and waited! Please release new chapters more often)