Reviews for Family - It's in the Blood |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Thanks for the chapter _. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Heh, gotta love that good ol' chaos! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Not a bad One-shot. Even though you don't update very often you tend to publish some pretty good stories. I am looking forward to seeing if you do another actual story though. I especially liked your Harry Potter/Mass Effect story. Then again I have always had a soft spot for Tali lol. Looking forward to your next story and keep up the good work. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Really enjoyed the story but I found a few issues: She clearly wanted to know more, but put it aside in favour of her lesson. "Well, most families don't have any special gifts. The Greengrasses don't, in fact the only families I know of that had them were Slytherin with Parseltongue and Tonks with metamorphamagi. - Starts off obviously Astoria, between the first sentence and her saying Greengrasses don't, but then it says Tonks has metamorphmagi. Maybe you meant for Harry to interrupt her and say the thing about Slytherin and Tonks. He hadn't met her yet canonically, but he might have heard of her his first year in your AU. Later sentences make it clear that the end of this was Harry talking, even if the start of it was Astoria. Why would Astoria's father be okay with having Daphne in the middle of the war but not Astoria? Harry became a teacher, but people saw the things he'd taught his kids and friends, presumably this means he was doing homeschooling and yet it says that Astoria was a headmisstress... If they opened their own school it should have been mentioned and the public would have seen what other students learnt from him. Additionally, Hogwarts closing instead of changing or a new school opening is very strange. No British school? |
![]() ![]() ![]() You have given us another wonderful tale. I look forward to your next project. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Loved it! Great work! Neat way to handle Riddle and all the other idiots |
![]() ![]() ![]() Nice story nice story. Loved the work as always. I like how blood couldn’t harm senior blood. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Excellent story. It’s even more impressive as you made up an OC, gave him a great and believable voice. Always glad to see a story from you. Can’t wait for what you write next. |