Five months or not I'm happy it's not abandoned Can't wait for the second task..

I love this story

Love this story and was glad to see another chapter. The character interactions are just as great as always. Can't wait for more.

I was very excited to see the new chapter of your story! I delayed reading this one until I had gone back and read all the previous, so this review is a little late. Still, very glad you're still writing!

I'm glad Sirius made an appearance, and I enjoy the trope of "Padfoot is a dog," though him bolting away is a bit confusing upon initial read. I'm very curious to learn what Harry's planning (presumably) for the golem. It's lovely to read more about how he and Fleur interact - I'm really enjoying that.

One side note - Governor Baguette is the best owl name I've ever seen.

I really like your style of writing, it flows well.

Fun chapter

As always a great chapter, nice little teaser title too. Throughout this entire story and your other stories I am always the most impressed by your dialogue, it sounds natural and like real people talking. This is an achievement on its own in any language but even more impressive when it isn't your native one. Anyways hope life is treating you well and if we have to wait a while between chapters so be it, hopefully we will have some more flowerpot one shots to tide us over.

So happy to see you've updated again, as this is one of my all-time favorite stories. Hope you’ve been well. This chapter is amazing as all the others, you always absolutely nail the character interactions. Thanks for posting!

I always confuse this story with another one I’m following, so whenever I see the update notifications and start to read I get really confused for a few moments. Still, this story is just as good as that one.

Hello,

Way to make me cry on my birthday, Dave. I absolutely adore all your stories (you've heard me gush aplenty in the discord), Nesting especially holds a special place in my heart. However, I think your ability as a writer shines best here, in your longer story. You write the burgeoning relationship extremely well, the trepidation, the uncertainty but through it all, the growing ardor.
The relationship begins uniquely and organically, the friendship and comradery slowly shifting into delicate bloom of love is artfully done and makes me melt inside. I think your writing style is incredibly well suited to this form of storytelling, your words drip with emotive weight, your prose is poetic and reveals very stylishly the feelings and actions of your characters. This is a talent that the reader can see rapidly being honed as a skill when reading from Ch.1 to Ch.16 - not to forget your amazing one-shots.
Another aspect of your story/stories that I adore is your characterizations. You take Fleur as she is, at face value from GOF, but add more substance to her character. So many authors shy away from making her haughty or prideful, instead they co-opt her character to make her more palatable. This can be interesting but I feel it does a disservice to her. Your Fleur is immediately interesting, and that captivation never changes even as she, herself, changes throughout your story. She grows and the reader learns more about her through her interactions with Harry and other characters but not once do I become uninterested in her. She is such a well-fleshed out character, positively alive in the pages and I adore her. Only an accomplished writer who knows the character intimately can be so effective at making her jump out at the reader like this. It is obvious that you have a very clear picture of her in your head and take great care in making her that way in your writing. Marvelous!
The Yule scene is especially dear to me, I greatly enjoy the quirks and picadilloes your Fleur has, they are humanizing and adorable. She isn't perfect, she has foibles like the rest of us, but you are able to turn them just right so the reader finds them endearing... just like Harry does. This, I feel, is the highest praise that can be given to a first-person point of view story. You actually can harmonize the feelings of the reader with the feelings of the titular character, Harry. We've talked about how difficult I find writing this sort of POV, which makes me all the more impressed by your deft use and mastery of it. Kudos!
Thank you for continuing this heartfelt, gorgeous story about two lovely characters and their journey towards one another. It is a grand story and one that has a special place in my heart. You are the author that got me into this pairing, into the discord, and even into writing fanfiction myself.

All the best,
Char

The first thing I noticed about your story was usage of a first person perspective, something that normally causes me to be hesitant to keep reading as I find that, more often than not, it is not used well. I am happy to say that you have proven an exception to the rule the majority of the time, although I did notice some rather jarring mixtures of first and second person in the latter section of ch. 15 after the switch in character perspective. Speaking of characters, you have acquitted yourself very well in this area of writing.

Each of your characters has a remarkable amount of depth, even the background characters display more than two dimensions at almost all times. I am particularly impressed with the way you have handled the character dynamics, as each actor in a situation responds differently based on the other actors involved. Most notable is the way these character dynamics develop over time, using Cho Chang and Fleur at the Yule Ball as a microcosm, characters who have had little interaction with each other bahave with polite distance before becoming more comfortable and acquainted in an organic and realistic manner. I am particularly impressed that you manage this within a single chapter as opposed to relying on the crutch of breaks between chapters as a way to say "last episode they met and now this episode they have spent time together and are friends", without actually showing the development. Speaking of development, a few words on the development of your characters emotionally, intellectually, and magically.
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To begin with I don't think your characters are developing very much emotionally (in sense of personal evolution, not in relationships), and I honestly think that is good. Too many times over the years I have read stories where characters start off children and in less than six months are adults in mind if not body. This is I think symptomatic of authors desiring to raise the maturity of the story without taking time for logic, the fact is that the characters in Harry Potter are almost universally a mix of children, teens and young adults, and that is not an age group prone to rapid maturation. In fact, most people in that group would be far more likely to wilt under the pressures common to the plots of fanfiction rather than mature under them. I find the level of emotional development and growth your characters experience to be both realistically paced and believably... Occurring? Extrapolated? It happens believably is the point, so kudos to you. The areas of intellectual and magical development primarily apply to Harry and not other characters, so they get their own section.

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In many stories, (A Cadmean Victory, which stands as one of the all time best examples of our favorite pairing, among them), the main characters develoment of intellectual prowess is not handled well. Too often a character is suddenly smarter, harder working and more focused than before, seemingly for no reason or for too cheap a price. Other times a character will maintain a generally low quality of effort and still be able to achieve feats which should, in all honesty, be beyond them. This is not the case in your story, your version of Harry is rather more puissant than most and takes advantage of it. However, you have made it clear that this is not because he is "just that awesome", as would be the case for a mary sue, or else "he just really knuckled down and did the work", as would befit an author who does not seem to grasp in the implied complexity of what they creating. Instead your Harry is rather like a sledgehammer, he is strong and he knows it, and he uses that strength to blunder through adversity with extreme prejudice, but he knows that there are things beyond his ability. More critically when he encounters something he does not understand, he is often forced to seek assistance rather than just "figuring it out", and his goal is not always possible even then. The animation magic being a prime example. This shows that you as an author understand the need to place limitations on your characters abilities, both for realism and so that there is room for growth. Speaking of growth, let us move on to your handling of the burdgeoning relationship between the principle characters.
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The relationship between Harry and Fleur is, in a word, good. Not in a vague nebulous sense, but in the literal definition of the word. It is mutually beneficial, it is natural, it edifies and builds both parties up, it compliments the weaknesses and strengths of both parties and it has realistic progression from strangers to acquaintances to friends. It is, fundamentally speaking, a good thing. Unfortunately I cannot in good conscience say that the depiction of the relationship is unilaterally masterful as I have yet to read your handling of the relationship once the two main characters actually get together, and the proof, as they say, is in the pudding. That said, the depiction of the non romantic side of Harry and Fleur's relationship is masterful. As one final aside, I wish to discuss a finer aspect of character develoment that greatly strengthens your story, and greatly weakens others. That being the "retconning" of characters personalities without any indication.

In your story Harry Potter is very flippant, McGonnagall is very approachable, Cedric Diggory is an everyman, and Ron Weasley knows the graceful and humble admittance of error. All of these are drastically different from their canon characterizations, and these changes are made entirely without fanfare, indeed often entirely before the story begins. This is not, however, at all a bad thing. The story of the canon books is very heavy at times, and almost universally becomes darker and more hopeless over time. As such characters like your version of Harry, skilled in the art of flippancy, would be detrimental as main characters for the overall tone of the story. However, you use them to great effect. Harry in particular not only feels "like Harry", but matches and compliments the overall tone of the story, and the same can be said of every other character thus far.

In conclusion your story is a masterful blend of myriad elements that, as of yet, has yet to miss a beat. Well done my friend, well done.

Super. Can't wait for more.

Thankd

Thanks

I don't exactly remember which chapter this was but with a lot of french words you put 2 e depending on the gender like enchaté for men and enchantée for woman

Hello, me again, again. I'm not sure if I missed errors in the previous chapters or if this one had more then the first three. Anyways, I don't think I've said it yet but I'm really enjoying your story. Tuesdays are my busy day and I hope I can read more then a single chapter tomorrow. Regardless, onto the small grammar/ spelling errors I found:
"how did they do managed in so short time" should be corrected to read something like,how did they managed to do this in such a short time?"
During the Hermione and Ron verbal spat, "Everything always go to him!" should be corrected to, "Everything always goes to him!" just makes the sentence flow a bit better in my opinion. "I grew up in a big, beautiful, empty house Ronald" is a sentence I made combining the two you had with Hermione's reply to Ron, commas allow some great tone setting possibilities of you let them. Here's another twosome correction, "I would give all to have (a) brother who cared!" and, "You don't know what (it's)like to be alone!" I also see an issue with you ending dialouge with commas versus periods, exclamation points or question marks, dialouge should almost always end with some form of non-comma based punctuation. Most of the issues I saw with this chapter was your constant use of commas rather then using different punctuation in dialouge. You use some words correctly like combining, 'you' and 'are' into 'you're' but you don't always use the right form of these words for the tone of your story. That's just my opinion on it though. Thanks for writing this story and I'm excited to see what you have happen next, especially with how you handle the Harry v Ron conflict.