Lol Mawile finding out this Red got some Fae in em. You will be a DragonSlayer Mawile.

On bro we gone go find our own starter.

Hope he comes back for lil Mia.

First time reading this fic, but holy shit is it good.

Good characters, good worldbuilding, good... everything, really.

Red's team interaction is, of course, the best of the best of the best

And I am seriously considering Mawile for my new favorite pokemon (along with Whimsicott, of course, nothing can surpass Whimsicott, stand together on the top maybe, but never surpass Whimsicott), thanks to you

I honestly can’t describe how amazing this fic is. Best I’ve ever read.

Each character’s voice is distinct and unique, and unlike most fics, I could understand exactly who was speaking- even if they were a bloody Pokemon- without the need for speech descriptors. And most importantly, they all felt real. Each person and Pokemon had a rational (well, as rational as a Pokemon can be) and intelligent thought process and none of them suffered the common writer’s issue of making the protagonist smart and everyone else stupid.

Don’t even get me started on the battles. Ducking incredible. Loved the detail and how each battle truly felt like a vicious battle between creatures of war. Every battle felt truly high stakes and had me unable to stop reading. Personal favourite was the whole Viridian Forest sequence against Travers and Meyers; that switch in Travers from chill to cold hearted was an awesome read.

Your foray into the world building and history of the Pokemon universe is seamless and incredibly interesting. I absolutely love how you’ve introduced all this lore, especially with how you’ve tied it to the unique elements of your work. Wish the actual series was as interesting as this lmao, especially with the ideas of legendaries being these mythical beings of destruction, and the forbidden zones.

The way tension and suspense is continually built throughout the story is awesome. Thought it was crazy impressive how you both were able to continually make every important story thread build and then twine together during the climactic moments . Most of the time, I struggle to find interest in these jumping POVs as they go from the main plot to much less interesting side characters/plot. But this fic- no matter the POV- had me gripped. Didn’t matter what POV it was, as long as there was more. Literally had me staying up to read this fic until my eyes could no longer stay open and even then, I had to finish it this morning.

I’m sure there’s much I’m forgetting to mention as I practically binged this in 3 days. However, as this fic is truly peak, I will have to make a ffnet account so I can bookmark and come reread eventually.

Both of you are truly skilled writers. Thank you for this truly great fic. I’m looking forward to checking out your other works as well.

why won't you continue this? it has been a year

its been a bloody year dont listen to hatter and update this please

Alakazam don't have tails.

What the hell is this BS plot with Delia and Cyrus?

Legend was infinitesimally better than whatever this is.

I really enjoyed this Fic, and I hope it continues.

I don't get why everyone is dogging on this story, it has a good plot, great anticipation, andthe most important thing many stories here seem to lack: proper grammar! I do think that the pacing is pretty good, but the progression is very... erratic. The world you have built here is very complicated, not that that is a bad thing, but it all gets muddy in some areas. The deviation from the tradional eight badge progression is fine, but the pace you have set will be hard to keep up with I think. All these huge events happening before Red even leaves Pewter City, unless he decides to deviate from his plan of being a trainer and become a researcher, or some other path that lets him have an excuse to take place in more excitng events like what has happened so far, the story is going to seem very dull or slow after the whole Mewtwo debacle is done with. Unless you plan to end the story with Mewtwo killing everyone. There are some characters that seem thrown in for no real reason than shock factor or some other reason, some examples being Cyrus who is Petrel who is also Red's father, or Ghetsis being the leader of the Wataru clan before Lance. There are some problems with the story, yes. That being said, its still a great storg that I sincerely hope that you continue, I really have enjoyed it o far and I'm sure many others have too. I don't know if this review is good at getting my thoughts across, this is my first time writing a really big review like this, I usually just say "I like the story!" and that's it lol.

i genuinely have no idea how you guys write a fic like monochrome, a great fuckin fanfic, and somehow simultaneously write THIS heaping pile of dogshit? This is one of the worst pokemon fanfics i've ever read. This shit is worse than all 50 dozen betrayed ash fanfics put together lmao. Why is this thing listed as a humor/adventure story when it's more drama filled than the average daytime soap opera. Like fuck, it's gotta be the cringiest fucking story i've read in a long fucking time. delete this garbage

this fucking sucked. Not interesting, infuriating. Literally every adult character in this chapter was infuriating. Red's dumb as fuck too, but the adults he has in his life have to be heavily mentally challenged. im convinced that this story is fuckin going nowhere fast. delete this dogshit and quit advertising your dog ass discord, faggot

This fic should've had drama as tag there's to much drama from nearly getting killed by pikachu attempted murder from ritchie Misty loosing her starter like wtf this is not the fic I wanted to read tbh