Reviews for Black Sunset
XLR8wuzhere chapter 1 . 9/29
Ino and Kurenai Sakura and whoever else you added
silver.blast96 chapter 6 . 9/28
Total shitfic! Lol steer clear of this raging trash fire!
Danirodriguez1995 chapter 7 . 9/14
Uffff very good this story, it looks like the ones that VFSNAKE does, you showed off, I hope more stories like this naruto-like, thank you.
Monster King chapter 7 . 9/12
Great job
Atlantistheepic chapter 4 . 9/9
Okay you need to go back over your chapters because wtf is sakura doing at the spar(beat down) you really need to go over these with a fine toothed comb and fix these small errors
Scott Marshall1 chapter 6 . 9/8
What is going on ino and Kurenai where with naruto now there not
agnar chapter 2 . 9/7
Eh, lost me on the re-read in chapter 1, by inserting Sakura, one of the meanest to Naruto, and removing Ino. Gonna go remove this now and pretend it remained as it was originally written.
atengawchok chapter 4 . 9/7
I really wish ino was the on naruto's side but please make sure it was ino the one screeching 'how could you hurt sasuke kun' instead of sakura. I really don't like sakura replacing in but hey it's not my story.
BJJF691 chapter 6 . 9/7
The wash boards sakura replace the sexy ino wow, just wow. The one that was the most violent to naruto became the winner. I'm speechless. Lol
PinkiePieParty122894 chapter 7 . 9/7
This was great
Guest chapter 1 . 9/1
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thunderofdeath97 chapter 7 . 8/31
well damn
Guest chapter 7 . 8/31
Oh boy why not just leave this and make new version of this. That way others can compare and make a decision based on how the flow of the story went. That way no favorite or follow will not decreased.
D72 chapter 1 . 8/31
I totally dug it until Naruto was a furry.
Fuck it chapter 1 . 7/12
Tapped out at Chapter 4 - even my self promise to finish stories I start couldn't make me complete this shit.

1. Your writing sucks - learn punctuation and basic spelling. Capitalize at the beginning of sentences and when writing Proper nouns such as names.

2. Your Gary-Stu is nothing like Naruto. He's an arrogant asshole who should honestly die.

3. Why the fuck would you suck off Itachi the clan slayer and then be such an absolute dick about Sasuke? Seriously, Itachi is nine short of a dozen and should have been drowned as a child.

4. This story could have been so much shorter - especially since your sex scenes are... pathetic. Seriously, either watch better porn or even better go out and have actual sex.

5. Please, please take a writing class. Your ability to craft a legible work is utterly subpar.

Have a nice day.
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