Reviews for Shadow |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Sometimes I wish I could see the small details between these chapters, but other times i'm glad of how perfect this was paced– as all your stories are. I was so lost with who the 'carbon copy' was. But beautiful story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() His wise words were perfect leading to his passing. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I think you just quoted Little Mix to describe Rory's hands all over Logan and i'm here for it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I was smiling at the entire encounter the moment Mitchum showed up and Logan opened the door. Through and through, he is his father's son. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Whilst it's very clear what happened it would have been really interesting to see the conversation between RoryMitchum where they agree that she's the one who will take over from him at HPG. |
![]() ![]() This is an interesting concept that you’ve developed into good story. It definitely shows creativity. But it’s a little too “jumpy” for my taste - like trying too hard to be literati hip. In the manner you portrayed Logan, it’s hard to believe that Rory would fall for him. To make this relationship believable, I think you would need to include a few more Rogan scenes such that the reader can see her attraction to Logan. As it now reads, Logan is too weak with never ending daddy issues. Lots of errors that need to be corrected. |
![]() ![]() ![]() OMG, what a beautiful finish. This is prose in its purest form. Wonderful. Thanks for sharing. |
![]() ![]() ![]() The last line of chapter 7 is beyond description, so funny and yet so on point. Love it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I am totally in love with this story. AYITL was such a total nuke out that it is so refreshing to find stories such as this that totally get what the last three years of the OS were all about. It's ASP story to tell but I am of the belief that finish your storyline yourself and own it rather than cop out by permitting everyone to complete it for you. She let all the fans down no matter which team you were on. Thank you for this wonderful side take on these beloved characters and thanks so much for including the incorrigible Mitchum in it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love the short and sweet it makes for such easy reading but not going to lie a quick bit of a proposal, a quick wedding and proposal could be cool too! But I get the Logan/Mitchum dynamic rather than Rogan! I would be interested to see what part Rory took up though |
![]() ![]() ![]() Shadow nickname is cute! Different as well :) I love how you reinvent scenes/lines from the show in you AU |
![]() ![]() ![]() I thought for a second Mitchum was going to have a thing for Rory. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Omg I got real scared with the Odette part but definitely loving that cute friendship! Anticipating Rogan and this Mitchum/Rory dynamic |
![]() ![]() ![]() Glad Gavin is gone, wasn’t even in it much and he was annoying me! Loving cheeky Logan! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very intrigued to see where this story goes! You can definitely see how far your writing has come. |