Reviews for The Player is a Part Timer
Guest chapter 15 . 7/18
More i want more, god this is soo good
Guest chapter 15 . 7/17
Still waiting for the next chapter
SneakyDevil chapter 1 . 6/18
For English not being your first language, it was alright, but you seem to overcompensate severely with punctuation. I would recommend a program like Grammarly, with the caveat that you should read aloud its suggestions to make sure the program is giving you a "right sounding" suggestion as it is mildly inaccurate when it comes to editing narrative writing.

Another thing. No one speaks in a semi-colon and in narrative writing the semi-colon is 99.99% of the time never used as when it comes to pacing it is better to use commas and periods.
darkangelsouls123456 chapter 1 . 5/16
What race is she
Christian Bernardino chapter 1 . 4/29
Any Updates yet pls
rick12 chapter 15 . 4/25
Well, that was fun.

Gillian can easily use the Excalibur fragments that they choose her over their original wielders, as seen with Excalibur Destruction where it burned Xenovia's hands and blasted her away.

Dominus has his goons go to issue the challenge to Gillian, her brother accepting it on her behalf. Rias, Sona, and Ravel tell Gillian's brother this, and he knows on her behalf.

Rias swearing in her heart to find out who Gillian and her brother are for real, whatever it takes. What the poor and pitiable devil girl didn't suspect is that it'll be revealed sooner who Gillian and her brother really are than she expected. It'll be a shock.

Quick question, Gillian is basically a true neutral character in all of this, correct? She's only affiliated with herself and her brother. She will never join any side, thus she will never join either Rias or Sona's peerages. Not to mention that the two devil heiresses have to protect Gillian and her cafe, since said cafe is part of their territory and they have to protect it and aid her.

Great chapter, man. Hope to see more~.
ChaoticInfluence chapter 15 . 3/28
KureijiRyuu chapter 9 . 3/19
I feel like the conversation between Gillian and Kiba was very one-sided. More like a Gillian speech than a conversation/discussion.

Other than that the fanfic is very good, thanks for the chapter
Dayside chapter 1 . 3/13
the grammar is quite poor indeed
Nastadoa chapter 12 . 2/25
iseki denied lol
Literally useless chapter 3 . 2/11
just 2 homies talking about employment, nothing weird here
Peroroncino chapter 1 . 2/8
Any Updatrs yet pls
miguel chapter 15 . 2/5
genial siguiente capitulo
Angeloux chapter 2 . 2/4
Something about the way this story is written makes it really difficult to read. I can explain it, but it just doesn't flow.
Guest chapter 1 . 1/29

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