Reviews for A Life of Lies
LucieRaindrop chapter 57 . 1/3
The story ist really good and it is a pity not to write it until the end.
You told by yourself there are only a few further chapters, so just go on .
That with the rape... I do not find it very well, but ok, it is artistic freedom... but should have everyone been told about it? And maybe you should have found another solution to justify the experiments. Maybe Snape could have been ordered or blackmailed from Voldemort to have an intended one-night-stand with Lily, just when he had token the experences potions and had her mixed something in her drink, too... or such like this.
Don't take it hard with the spelling mistakes, who found one can keep it .
I am not an natural speaker, too, but I did understand everything (I hope ).
nicolevictoria00 chapter 6 . 12/19/2022
wait so snape raped lily? the fuck? i love harry-is-snape's-son stories but you've just lost me here. that is just so unnecessary, seriously, how does that add to the plot at all? such a shame because this has been nice to read and i was looking forward to reading more
Grammar Fiend chapter 57 . 9/8/2021
You have some truly excellent ideas and some unique plot twists that I really enjoyed. However, your English skills need some strict attention. One cat: cat. More than one cat: cats (NOT cat's). One Potter: Potter. More than one Potter: Potters (NOT Potter's). There are NO apostrophes in pluralizations. This is Primary School English you need to review. Belonging to one Potter: Potter's. Belonging to more than one Potter: Potters' (or Potters's). The possessive requires an apostrophe (with a few exceptions: his, hers, ours, theirs).

Gryffindors, stairs, Grangers, ideas: all plural. No apostrophes. Sometimes, in English, we change the word itself to make the plural: mice, men, elves, children, stories. No apostrophes. Some words are also their own plurals: moose, fish. No apostrophes. Cat’s paw, ministry’s policy (one policy of one ministry), ministries’ policies (more than one policy of more than one ministry), night’s sleep, harm’s way, Potters’ fortune: all possessive, all require an apostrophe.

Not only do you not know how to use an apostrophe, you can apparently not differentiate between homonyms; their/there/they're, to/too/two, and your/you're are just a few you have regularly misused. You need to look up, and understand, the definitions of these words.

You also sometimes simply use the wrong word: decent is different from descent, quiet is not the same as quite. Paying more attention to every word you write will vastly improve your storytelling.

Also, why would everyone suddenly start referring to Callum as ‘Callie’? And why is Luna Lovegood, a fifth year, in NEWT potions? Further editing and attention to detail is required.

Please do not take my constructive criticism as a slight on your storytelling. You have talent for bringing your own characterizations to an imaginative plot line. Further grammatical editing can only improve your writing.

Thank you for your contribution to the world of Harry Potter Fan Fiction.
DaughterofHalt chapter 57 . 8/10/2021
Please update. I need to know how this ends. Please please please update.
DaughterofHalt chapter 54 . 8/10/2021
I really need to sleep, but I really really really need to know how this ends! This story is driving me crazy...
Guest chapter 9 . 6/14/2021
DUN DUN DUUN! Awesome story, btw on the last para Snape says Voldemort, he always say 'the Dark Lord.'
Guest chapter 8 . 6/14/2021
Not again! They keep hiding info from him! So unfair!
Guest chapter 3 . 6/14/2021
"Bite the boy's head of..." Is he a cannibal?! AH! LOL, hilar! Good story!
scgaraycochea chapter 57 . 1/28/2021
What a story, I love it, it's a shame you stoped writing, it would be great if you could start again and finish the story.
Thank you for share it!

PS: I'm sorry for my grammar and spell errors, English is not my birth language
Konner.the.pan-tran chapter 57 . 10/18/2020
Guest chapter 10 . 5/5/2019
Exciting stuff!
Guest chapter 6 . 5/5/2019
Guest chapter 3 . 5/5/2019
Great beginning! Good drama writing. I'm eager to see Venon's punishment. I'm sure you have SOMETHING in mind. LOL
jassdail6 chapter 57 . 3/20/2019
I am not happy with you by ending the story with a cliffhanger right before the final battle I am mad at you grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr
Animago chapter 2 . 11/23/2018
E aí severus, a salada tava maravilhosa? Kkkkkkkk
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