Reviews for Sealing My Own Fate
Darckcarlos chapter 1 . 9/25/2021
Oof the POV
Orodruin chapter 21 . 8/2/2021
There were a few things I liked about it: the course of development of a young Uzumaki in turning towards seals was fun. And I liked the way Sota's presence caused "unpredictable" changes in the Naruto timeline, and that you weren't afraid to make large changes (kill off a character) when you thought it made sense in your plot.

There were also many things I didn't like: the 2nd person POV was poorly written and I don't think it worked well for this story, a 1st or 3rd person POV would have worked better. The grammar was poor throughout the story but especially jarring in conversation, try reading the speech of your characters out loud after you write it and if it doesn't sound natural, consider changing it. Sota's development and the way he is treated by various people is unbelievable and never explained, the way he is treated and the way he develops is too different from his peers and past geniuses to be believable, and the majority of characters who interact with him are extremely out of character when doing so. Sota's behavior is also unbelievable and inconsistent, he jumps to conclusions about things from his first day that seem ridiculous for a child or an adult in a child's body, and he is constantly contradicting himself in thoughts and actions, the actions he does take that put him in bad situations could have been easily avoided from the beginning, so the sense that he is only working with Danzo because he has no other choice feels contrived and fake.

I like OCs and the SI trope opens up the universe to some fun changes, so I've read it this far, but unfortunately there isn't really anything that compels me to come back to it. With some heavy editing to fix the POV, the grammar, and the plot inconsistencies, I think this could be a fun story, but it really needs almost a complete rewrite. If you do decide to rewrite it (which is okay, most authors rewrite their books several times before publishing), I would love to read a 2nd or 3rd draft once things are a bit more polished. Best of luck in the future!
TrumpasaurusRex chapter 12 . 7/1/2021
I’m this fic, he’s completely made up his own rules on how Shadow Clones work. It’s nonsensical.
TrumpasaurusRex chapter 9 . 6/30/2021
I hate this MC.
He’s a self-insert, but he’s afraid of thunderstorms to the point he ends up in the fetal position. He also randomly starts hysterically crying like a baby. He even did it in the middle of a mission just because his teammate asked him if he thought he should try to regain his memories.
He is the biggest wuss and he’s annoying.
blisscity chapter 1 . 5/2/2021
The plot is really good but, I honestly don’t like the POV.
kanachan876 chapter 20 . 4/24/2021
you died from overreaching your boundaries. As a result of no one in the future to heal sasuke. the world is destine to doom. lol . kabuto the insect died actually bring a lot of storm. hmmm. orochimaru need someone that good at healing jutsu. so i think karin will replace kabuto. so.. nothing change in the end. probably. the story is good but lack of emotion because when i read this story, i cannot feel what the mc go through. why? because the 'you' actually make my brain go wierd that the 'you' become an MC name. like hey 'you' how are you doing... like that. but its your choice so go crazy.
d1n0s chapter 2 . 4/23/2021
It's a good story but the constant you you you you you is starting to grate.
Some of the sentences you try to make second person don't makes sense and you'll accidentally put you in twice.
The Lord Bread chapter 20 . 4/23/2021
Update moar plez
d1n0s chapter 1 . 4/23/2021
Second person is unusual but the story is good.
garneauyoann chapter 18 . 1/30/2021
Good ch Bro keep it up
Guest chapter 16 . 1/2/2021
Kumo sounds so much better than staying in Konoha at this point. Good story btw!
trend breaker chapter 4 . 12/12/2020
interesting but all the you that are supposed to be i is driving me crazy cant continue
ita123 chapter 14 . 12/11/2020
Geez, good Konoha village is starting to see controversy in my eyes now ,, thanks for the update and great chapter
ita123 chapter 12 . 10/30/2020
I like this story, cant wait for next chapter
JustDusty chapter 4 . 10/10/2020
You know, telling everybody everything is bound to have some consequences. Like having you tied to a chair getting mind raped by a yamanaka. I don't see any consequences
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