Why i can't open chapter 15

Well I wouldn’t be surprised if the younger generations of Quarians are mostly fascinated by the Rachni (especially when seeing their little ‘engineers’ in action) while the older generations of Quarians are having a more difficult time adjusting to them. That’s pretty much the way things like that usually go, isn’t it?

And I’m really interested (and hopeful) in seeing how things go with the Krogan after reading this chapter (good to know it’s not just me that finds the Vorcha unnerving).

And it wouldn’t just be strong warriors that the Krogan could bring to the Terran Alliance. They have tech that’s not just durable (which the Quarians would probably be interested in applying to their own tech, considering how delicate it tends to look), but pretty great too. I personally am very fond of the Blood Pack’s sub machine gun (made by their Krogan gunsmiths) from ME3. That thing can really bring the pain.

Interesting story so far, nice work.

It's been niggling at me this whole time but you've quite clearly plagiarized many parts from "The Fourth Council Race" fic. Like you've just taken chunks and partly rewritten them. Fair enough of you got inspiration but whole chunks are just blatantly plagiarized.

For anyone reading this, go read the fourth council race. While some parts of this are clearly unique, you can tell whole sections have just been nicked. C'mon dude, at least write it in your own words.

Good update.

Well after my last comment future chapters cleared most of my concerns. Still, be careful with that useful tool.

Just... it would be nice not have the shadowly forces in the darknesss keep pulling off things that is the eqivalent of pulling out an entire FTL engine out from where the sun don't shine. I know it creates and pushes plot but often they can easily get annoying.

Nice fic so far though.

Thanks for the new chapter, looking forward to the next one, hopefully in a month, not four.
Also, I like your answer to the critics, humanity should come to an understanding about their future in universe and stand together.
I certainly enjoyed seeing the council in their panicked desperation.

This was a beautiful chapter, I especially loved the museum scene and the display of human history and the council races reaction to it.
Could you have the Alliance host an Olympics and have them invite other races as well as Broadcast the event, I would really love to see other races opinion of such a large interplanetary sporting you

Great chapter

Hmm will we see more alien reactions to earth history/ native flora and fauna?
Cause I could see Krogan making a bet how many scorpion stings it takes before one needs medical help.

awesome work keep it up

Nice to see this story and you back.

Also I seen that most of Authors had the same problems with current chaos so its compleltly understandable that you had too, so don't feel bad about it. Tought its nice you care:).

As for the chapter itself, its nice and it prepares the stage for future development and sets up the tone for the immidiete future in the story. That is massive amount of espionage, covert missions, diplomacy, restructuring and expanding the military and industry, technological race with the Citadel trying to catch up to Terrans and the Terrans trying to keep the technological edge as much as possible over Citadel, trying to make the non alined races join Terrans and of course some Batarian blunder that will make the Terrans smash them like a ton of bricks, because lets be honest. Batarians are shitty soldiers compared to Turians and have even worse technology so Terrans should stomp them fairly easy, only the size of the Hegemony and number of worlds nedded to be sized would be any problem.

The only problem I had with this chapter is not showing Liaras reaction to the Prothen section of the museum and her tought on Human version of the fall of Prothen Empire.

On another note, I don't remember if I mentioned it before but the Terminus Systems are outside of Council jurisdiction and compromise of dozens semi independed systems that are each ruled by Warlords or gangs making it more a coalition of than a nation. So if Terrans decided to invade them and claim the terrritory for themsels after some dumb pirate attacked Terrans the Citadel can't do anything about it since they did nothing for millenia while knowing what exactly is happening there(slavery, amrs dealing, narcotics and many many more), and its important to remember that Ilos Realy is located in Terminus and that the certainly Rachni remember were it is, and htere you have all the technological data of Prothen Empire stashed alongside the pans and know how to make miniature Relays.

Thanks for chapter.

I like your story, though it can be a little long winded at times.

I do have to point out that you’re using semicolons (;) far too much and sometimes in places where it isn’t meant to be used:

‘With the opening of Earth and her colonies to the entire galaxy; we found ourselves on a crossroad where we must do our best to achieve progress through cooperation rather than through confrontation, as long we have the chance to choose.’

You should have used a simple comma after ‘galaxy’ instead.

I would cut down some of your long sentences too, so they don’t appear as one long paragraph.

I‘ve noticed, as well, you use ‘have’ in places where you are meant to use ‘has’.

Overall, I still like the plot and I’m quite excited to see where it goes.

MOAR PLS