|Reviews for In Your Eyes|
| Mecha-Foot chapter 1 . 7/6/2005
Good story, but the last block was so cluttered it was very hard to read. You should try to space it out more. I wanted to keep reading, but it was so hard to pick out the text.
| Loveless Girl 2002 chapter 1 . 5/31/2003
Extreamly corny, but sweet at the same time. Paragraphs need to be added, but its a good start. Love the comment about Angel
| j.m chapter 1 . 5/9/2003
Sorry, this was unreadable due to the format. It hurt my eyes!
| acs chapter 1 . 5/7/2003
It's not bad and though B/F has been done before many times I don't recall many 'suicidal Faith' stories set during that time period. With a little bit of polish it could be a nice little ficlet.
Unfortunately, it is difficult to read due to a lack of actual structure. Paragraphs are a GOOD thing to have, when used properly.
Also, you didn't need to (and probably shouldn't) give the vampire with a gun a name. And how did Buffy know his name ? He was the Buffy equivalent of a vampire "redshirt"
Knowing his name is pointless and distracting from the story.
And is this an alternate universe ( A/U) story or something from Season 3 you are squeezing into an existing timeline ?
It would be interesting to see this expanded/cleaned up.