Reviews for Harry Black Book 2: The Rising Darkness
Guest chapter 9 . 4/2/2021
Main problem with this story is too many OCs. There was no remote need for Claire to exist for example.
Zile0 chapter 34 . 3/28/2021
Headed straight over to book 3. Thank you so much for this fantastic and gripping series.
Fumbls chapter 1 . 3/16/2021
I stumbled over the title and for a second hoped this was a crossover/redo of the show “Black Books” but with Harry being the brooding asshole alcoholic with a terrible bookshop that magically never goes out of business.
marvinkitfox1 chapter 18 . 3/10/2021
Ah. So Fleur summons fire, and is now renamed as Fluer?
marvinkitfox1 chapter 8 . 3/8/2021
From across the pond. Beauxbatons?
It is in France, not in north america!
JUANMARTIN202000 chapter 5 . 3/7/2021
esta muy bien escrito algunas partes me conmovieron, me gusto mucho los comentarios sutiles de Nevil de la desconfianza del director
suziq968 chapter 15 . 2/24/2021
The only problem I had with this was you had them come in on the first day and light the goblet and introduce the other schools and say they had a day to enter. Then you talked about them training for a month and then had the names come out on what sounded like Halloween at one point. IDK if the order of scenes got messed up or what but that was all kinds of confusing. Really enjoying the story anyway.
Guest chapter 1 . 2/2/2021
Love your writing. Only picked up on these 'Harry Black' stories last week on night shift, so night shifts again and I have barn-stormed 'HB-1'. I have got to laugh though! Easy to tell you're a Yank! Bacon, eggs, with WAFFLES & SYRUP! What the blazes is that about?! In a central London old pub! lol! Bacon, eggs, sausages, mushrooms, grilled tomatoes, baked beans, two slice of toast and a large mug of tea, that's more like it! lol Love the stories, though! Oh yea, and the use of 'dove'! That's a feathered bird that looks like a small pigeon over here. We use 'dived'! Never mind. Keep writing.
'Two separate nations divided by a common language'. Love it. I work on a USAF airbase in Suffolk, England, RAF Lakenheath with USAF fighter jets. Well seen I am used to the lingo!

Regards David (I am using the work internet so I am not on my own lap top. Davinius Gerard Fogg on fanfiction.)
Ke1 chapter 13 . 1/20/2021
This shit .
Only shit. Fic veryyyyyy veryyyyyy shit
Midots chapter 33 . 1/20/2021
Great and original read so far... now on to book 3
odonnellzoo99 chapter 33 . 1/16/2021
Overall, I enjoyed this story and look forward to the next one. There was one thing that sticks out to me that I found disappointing about the story. Harry spent a lot of time feeling guilty about the innocent people that he couldn't save, but I don't remember anyone pointing out the number people that he did save because of his actions. For example, although Harry was told not to feel guilty about the 27 people that died following him defending people at the World Cup attack, no one mentions how many people would have been slaughtered if he hadn't had help with a defense. It seems there were multiple opportunities for Harry's friends and family to point out to him that his actions saved more people than following him put people in danger.
That was my particular nit to pick. Otherwise, great characters and story.
Thanks!
odonnellzoo99 chapter 28 . 1/16/2021
I guessed the ritual would affect the soul piece, but I'm embarrassed to admit that I didn't think about it until right before the ritual started.
odonnellzoo99 chapter 25 . 1/16/2021
So now my question is does this situation cause a reaction with the crap that Dumbledore has been planting in Harry's mind and cause him to stop trusting her and not just have hurt feelings? Since those chapters have already been written, time to read on.
odonnellzoo99 chapter 12 . 1/15/2021
I don't get why readers would criticize you as a writer, because they don't like Dumbledore in this story. I think you've done a good job of portraying him the way you want him to be in this story. I don't like him in this story at all, but I don't like people like that in RL so I don't like the character. Isn't that a sign of good writing?
These anonymous reviewers are another example of adults lashing out in anger anytime they are uncomfortable. I remember when that was only toddlers and the emotionally unstable.
odonnellzoo99 chapter 11 . 1/15/2021
I'm hoping at some point Dumbledore gets what's coming to him.
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