Reviews for A Veela's Charmer complete
Neko-fire demon tempest chapter 4 . 2/11
Harry's a bit Mary-sue and the story itself is very short.
Mukuro234 chapter 14 . 7/2/2014
Awe this was such a sweet story
SlytherinDraco chapter 12 . 6/7/2014
Not to be a part,but your grammer was lacking in a better sense of things. Also,you could improve on your tenses(I was a but lost when you used the wrong tense). The story itself is great. Just a few minor details that I'm sure you'll be able to fix with some practice. Trust me, I had the same problems,just a whole-lot worse.
Heksy chapter 1 . 12/10/2013
And this is as far as I am willing to go. The story seems promising, but the many errors in this chapter alone make me not want to read on. I would advise you to seek out a beta reader. Good luck.
Sarah chapter 14 . 6/3/2013
Dude NO! It's expecto patronus! Accio is to bring something towards you! Other than that your story is awsome. By the way the twins are fred and george
Rooz990 chapter 14 . 9/4/2011
SheriLyn chapter 7 . 7/5/2011
I really hope your not american, because your grasp of the english lang. leaves a lot to be desired. That said, the story line is interesting but I cant continue to read because of the writing itself. Get a beta or atleast a wordprocessing program. Sry
Guest chapter 14 . 6/27/2011
dear author

you are my new fole moddel i love this story when i finished reading it i nearly sobbed with sorrow cause it was finished harry is adorable and so is draco will you write more please i don't even care about your grammer for it is the best fanfic i have ever read to be honest i am a bit like harry but i am a girl i get embarresed easy and have a hot temper that only really annoyng people get to see my friends say thet i am very shy so they can trust me with any secret i am secretly proud and touched that they trust me than much i know you wrote this a long time ago but i just resntly discovered fanfics and am really into it i looooove you so much and i think your writing is even better than the original book

love your very adoring fan

ella jenkins
Mika the Dark princess chapter 14 . 7/12/2010
Lov it
Amras2007 chapter 14 . 5/5/2010
this was a great idea, i see that you have not writen anything for a long while. if you ever dicide to write again a sugest you rewrite this story with more detail and a beta. i was a great idea for a fic )i liked it
bhappy137 chapter 5 . 3/22/2009
hey your story is very cute but i don't think you read over it a lot of words were left out in chapter 5 you left out love when harry asked do you love me and in chapter 4 you left out you are when draco said you are gorgeous and you may want to make your chapters longer when thay are this short they just don't hold your intrest for very long. it probrably would have been better as a one or two shot but that is just my opinion but other than that you gave a good amount of detail to most things though you could have given more info to the charmer thing such a big part of the story should cover more than one paragraph but that is just my opinion. sorry i had to critisize so much it really is a good story
crystal chapter 1 . 8/14/2008
hello Val,

i'm a reader of you from China,i love your book so much that i want to translate it into Chinese,may i get your permission?

if you agree, please mail me on .

hpoing you can agree and waiting for your answer.

best wishes

Bittersweet Dream chapter 14 . 9/27/2007
The story is great. but i was wondering if you could go over the first couple of chapters and make it look long and go over some grammer and such. aside from that the story is great.
magick chapter 5 . 5/31/2007
was this translated? because the english is terrible, i love the plot and the idea of a "charmer" but it is very very difficult to read you need an english beta
Matthew Sulpizi chapter 8 . 4/22/2007
The story outline is good, however the way in which it was written is shit. Sentenses dont make any sense and words are missing. Chapters are only 2- 3 sentences long.

I dont reccomend this story, however if it were redone using the stories theme of Harry being a Special kind of Veela and Malfoy being Veela, it should be good.
56 | Page 1 2 3 .. Last Next »