Tf a bit too much suffering for poor Victoria isn't it? How'd a malfoy end up in such a state anyways

I imagine you aren't going to look at this, because of how late this is, but holy shit I started getting a bad feeling when you started propagating old baseless rumors about New Orleans after Katrina. But having the house elf call their owner "Masta"? Having the girl say "They looked like redguards... smelled of drugs and smoke..." Jesus man, this has to be hands down the most racist fan fiction I've ever read. I'm so thankful that you seem to have stopped writing fanfiction.

wtf why you put her going through that thats f'd up

Well I was only here for Skyrim, and the gamers mind sociopathy ruined even that. Disappointing.

thought you were going to help that other raped woman...

Peacing out before I even got halfway through the first chapter. I despise whatever entity you have setting him up. I hate gamer stories where the entity and gamer interact. Especially when it’s an evil asshole ROB. Story is garbage from the get go.

why would he be loyal to this universes America when he's literally traveling a infinite multiverse none of which are the country he knew and called home, that's like protecting the land your original house was on in every new world you visit even when in the new world it might never have been yours in the first place, seems like it would get old pretty quick seeing as none of its actually the place you where loyal to in the first place

this chapter could do with less rants about the "greatness of America"

you said that the Montgomerys came over with William the Conqueror/The Bastard. why is the head of the family Anglo Saxon rather than Norman, then?

you said that it was 92. the soviet union collapsed in 91. the cold War is definitely over.

for a second I thought that your sense of scale was seriously off, and that you were trying to claim that the British Isles were the size of Tamriel.

well, that's somewhat disappointing.

probably would have went with smuggler and sniper, myself.

as far as whiterun being the economic center of Skyrim, I think Solitude is at least as wealthy. then maybe Windhelm, Riften, and Makarth.

personally, I probably wouldn't be fucking with aby daedric princes. or at least keep it to like, Azura and Meridia.