|Reviews for A Storm of Swords|
| Truth chapter 19 . 12/3
Honestly Im kinda glad you dropped this story. Your stories are interesting overall but this one was walking trigger.
You repeatedly try to rationalize a characters motive or even justify them (I bet you're the type who would say Obito from Naruto was so sad and completely ignore how his actions killed thousands), but get defensive when people point how your poor interpretation of Gokudera. He doesn't have to be a good guy or stay, but you make him out to be a monster when plenty of characters such as Reborn are far more monsterous.
I get Natsumi is a child but you are making sky flames sound like a drug and gets people to calm down by getting addicted to them. I know the sky bonding stuff is mostly fanon but you've made it sound horrific by having Shirou depend on it rather than come to terms with his past. Like drugging yourself as the easy path as oppose to say years od therapy to at least move on from a delibitating experience.
This thing with Taiga, it was rather a poor attempt to rationalize Luck and a super shallow attempt to contemplate the ideas of Fate and Destiny. What a few lines to sound insightful and that's it? You don't bother trying to expand and make it a theme of the story do you?
I feel dirty when you try to rationalize Natumi's budding sexuality. It just sounds like your fetish rather than anything genuine for the character development. Seriously pointless.
Im quite happy you have given up on your stories. It's crap like this that gives fanfiction a poor reputation.
| Son-Of-Scorn chapter 32 . 10/30
I know its unlikely but god do i want some updates for this, not saying your other stories are bad, because theyre not, but this is probably my favourite KHR story and i cant keep rereading this without feeling disappointed at the end, please update this or at least let us know if its dead so ill know either way.
| Yog-sothsoth chapter 21 . 10/26
You know what? You're actually one of the best authors I've ever seen. Ah, if only your skin was a bit thicker...
| guest chapter 32 . 10/11
a bunch of yip yap
| guest chapter 28 . 10/11
fkn taiga might as well be a main character with how much shes shoehorned into every scene
| Maria Gabriela Gutierrez chapter 32 . 10/10
| paradoxreader chapter 32 . 9/25
gonna be honest i thought it was gonna be natsumi x shirou due to the gender swap but since was gender swap even if others i would understand but to go back to kyoko just make the gender swap inrrrelevant ... I don't see the impact especially since she goes for the least character development or interesting one out of all the choice even counting the womens
| HalfmoonSilver80 chapter 32 . 9/16
Why must this fic end? it was nice. Great even. Yet it had stop
| PLPanda chapter 32 . 8/25
so far the story was amazing. the pace could use some work but I can't really complain because how it developed all the characters.
Shirou feels kind like his canon self. I also loved the nod to the fact that Taiga's grandfather is a Yakuza Boss.
great work and I hope to read more in the future
| Ataex chapter 32 . 7/25
I see that you’re still writing stories (but until I catch up with Bookworm I’m not reading them ;) ) so I’ll ask:
Do you have any plans to update this story?
I just need more Reborn and Shirou shenanigans
| Cross69 chapter 26 . 7/21
I would've shot her
| LackOfUpdates chapter 1 . 5/15
This is literally your best work
| Pixelitus chapter 4 . 5/8
Oh. Joy. Obsessed hit man subordinate Shirou Emiya. Fun. Great. Guess we’re locked into the subordinate right. Fuck it, fine, hopefully this can still work itself out.
Why would you portray Shirou as ‘skilled?’ Frankly, he’s nothing close to that. He’s a faker that, while he does has some swordsmanship, it only becomes anything impressive when he draws from the experience of the wielders of the weapon he’s using. With how skilled you’re making Tsuyoshi turn out to be, it just doesn’t make any real sense. And it would already be tough enough on Shirou, fighting with no reinforcement as a *thirteen year old kid* against a grown man at the peak of human fitness with years of experience under his belt and far more talent in swordsmanship than Shirou could ever hope to have.
Yeah, I’m pretty sure you’re entirely wrong about Timoteo, but eh. And it’s funny that you say that they’re so bad when he’s a goddamn mafioso. What did you expect either way?
You know, for both your sake and mine, it might be best for me to tap out now. It wouldn’t be right of me to just keep going every chapter, constantly complaining on what I dislike. I’ll leave this fic here for now. Thank you, and have a nice day.
| Pixelitus chapter 3 . 5/8
Oh, truly so smart Shirou. Give enchanted clothing with obvious Celtic Runes(which he shouldn’t even be able to do because Reinforcement, Gradiation Air, Structural Analysis, Alteration, and Tracing are the only things he can do, and even if he spent his whole life learning those runes they sure as hell wouldn’t he high-quality!) to the person that has an Assassin/Tutor monitoring them 24/7. That’ll totally work out well.
Man, Shirou only has Storm and Sun? That’s depressing. Storm feels weird too. Sun kind of fits, but it feels boring just giving him Storm and Sun. Though, it was said that those were the ones high-quality enough to be apparent. Hopefully, there will be more in store. Heck, Shirou might’ve even done something to suppress his other flames so other people couldn’t sense them like he could, kind of like how he recreated the rings…
| Pixelitus chapter 2 . 5/8
About the lightning thing, why not just give him multiple Flame types?
God, I’m really worried. There’s just *something* about Shirou being a subordinate to someone that bothers me a lot.