amazing

This story masterfully captures the emotional weight of Izuku's struggles and the complexities of his relationships. The raw, honest portrayal of his inner turmoil and the impact of his actions on others is deeply moving.

To be honest, I'd give this a good 8 outta 10. I like hot chocolate with belgian accents and extra cream. No one asked, I know, but hey, I like sharing.

Mist
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A few things to point out. Just because he studied human genetics doesn't automatically mean that he wouldn't have to study biology unless he majored it. Absolutely not. There are many other things that need to be studied in biology, such as botany. Izuku couldn't have just studied plant biology.

Another thing. Kurogiri was literally introduced as a fog of a character that didn't have a tangible form, which is by Kurogiri couldn't have slammed into Izuku like that. Kurogiri assuming that Izuku was Ujiko's apprentice is feasible, but is not all that plausible.

How long did the kid stay on the ground for to not have noticed Kurogiri casually scan through his phone and look at what he's reading? Izuku simply agreeing to a random stranger wanting to take him to some place is also extremely improbable.

Kurogiri's unhappiness and grief feels forced, like it isn't really there. No one jokes about their friend's remains.

Mist
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Hello author-san. Great chapter, it's well done and doesn't have any glaring flaws. The story and execution is pretty great, to be honest. It would do you good if you tried fixing these flaws I state below:

1) Your pacing. If you story's pacing was a bit less rushed, it would be a great improvement to your story. Take a deep breath, think real hard about what you're going to write next, what EXACTLY you're going to write next and then type it out. I'll give you an example. Where you showed how Izuku slipped away from All Might, you could've added more detail as to where he was moving throw. While he's thinking, you should interject his thoughts with random everyday motions in between. This gives breathing room. Not only that, but it adds character.

2) While you're writing, the thought process isn't crystal clear, even if it is there. When Izuku ponders that question, you can follow his thought process, but at other times, you don't. There's also none of that Izuku-like optimism at the right moments. The difference between his optimistic side and his pessimistic side should be starkly contrasting, so much so that it's almost comedic.

3) Your descriptors need help. The descriptors you're using now are pretty generic. Add more vivid and new words that have no job there and through trial and error, you get the write combo. You should add more relatable but new comparisons, because that's just interesting.

Overall, your story is well-rounded. It has good potential, but it's not the best it can be. I'm not saying it's bad or anything and it is not average. Definitely not. *Shivers at the thought of this story being average*. I'd say your writing is on the top 10% of all the fanfics in the MHA category, which might not be much, but it's actually a lot. I'd give you a high A tier range. For reference, that's 8.7/10.

Amazing. Simply Amazing.

Daym i just love your writing so so so much

Daym im a bit disgusted by izuku here but his reaction is understandable just heart wrenching

AHHHHHHHHH TALK TO HER YOU EURGGGGGGHHHHHHHHHHHH!
Anyway, thank you for the chapter.

Fucking awesome.

Quite the busy lad.

Yes amazing

well this getting interesting .

origins make think of two idea had about quirks one is that lot legends of demons ,Fay ,Monsters ,heroes ,titans and gods might first period when quirks popped up .Second is that Planets mean prepare for threat outside of it self .By give species on it these abilities they chance to repair damages done and able match threat outer space attack .

I want to see more detail on things like Izuku fighting. That description at the end of him walking was really cool. And I’d love to see more of what his presence makes people feel. Does he summon violin music like AFO?
I like that AFO is planning on taking the quirks of the things Izuku sends his way. And I’m hoping that this does backfire somewhat on Izuku. I want to see an epic battle. It would be cool if Izuku decides he may need to be able to make and inject quirks on the fly, so he miniaturizes part of his lab and that lets him make quirks while fighting.
I even know how he could do it. He could use Rule’s quirk. The size changing one, to enlarge pieces of material before having them be made with perfect accuracy into the components he needs. And then shrink them back down. And then using cable size adapters he can input info into them. I think that would be a really cool thing. And it would fit with his techno wizard vibes.
I do think we need more info on this kingdom that Izuku just destabilized. Specifically the one with that queen, like what heroes did she repel?