Reviews for The Apprentice |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Enjoyed the story very much. Very engrossing. Too many late nights reading it. Agreed with other reviewers that some conversations were hard to follow as you didn’t know who was speaking what. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Absolutely brilliant! A delight to read. |
![]() ![]() ![]() That was really good, I enjoyed the different perspectives during the story. DMR |
![]() ![]() ![]() I’m almost finished and I’ve gotta say that this is one of the best stories I’ve read in a long time. It is so unique with a pairing I greatly enjoy so thank you for sharing. Your writing will get better with practice so don’t let the criticisms of others get you down. I’ll be following you so I can read more of your fics as you complete them. Thank you for sharing your writings! |
![]() ![]() Please please can you write a sequel to this story! |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I would like to say that it take courage to have a pairing unusual. It does make your story more original. Thank you for sharing. I do like this story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thank you for this storythough the pairing is not one I usually look for and honestly I only randomly found this while looking for another story I read long ago, your writing and story telling capabilities are amazing and well worth reading. I hope you continue to write in the future. |
![]() ![]() ![]() For the most part I enjoyed the story. I would be interested to read more by you. However I highly recommend having someone with English as their first language edit for you. There were multiple places in every chapter I would get confused on who was speaking or what was happening. It prevented me from being able to really get swept into the story and connect with it because I was constantly going back and rereading and interpreting what you meant. I hope you continue to write though, because overall it was good. |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Reading again! This is one of my favorites because of the fascinating magic and the relationship development between Hermione and her found family of former Death Eaters. Respect, love and honor are deeply explored and it is rather fascinating! |
![]() ![]() Worth the wait |
![]() ![]() ![]() I enjoyed this so much. This was the Hermione the world deserved, and not the one canon provided by the end. I’m in awe of the character development. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wait, people are complaining about the pairing that is tagged in the preview? The whole reason I started it? Wow, just when you think they can’t surprise you anymore. Anyway, I adoring it. Tiny constructive suggestion- when there are multiple characters of the same gender in a scene, identify who is speaking or acting every so often, it can be hard to follow all the ‘he’s and ‘hims’s |
![]() ![]() ![]() It isn’t like an anthropology class- it is one. Participant observation is a huge tool. Also, really hoping Ron screws up and gets zapped. |