Reviews for Hidden Affections
DJ Rodriguez chapter 12 . 4/16/2020
Nice one here! It seems that Ron is certainly full of surprises here, and I can only imagine what will happen down to the line for him and Bonnie. And also it seems that Josh's will and skills will be tested to the max in here. And also, will Kim and Bonnie kill each other or settle for a simple wrestling match?

And I hope that Tara King is shown in a good light in your story. Keep it up!
OldAccountThatIsNotUsed5770 chapter 12 . 4/15/2020
Very good! I think this chapter was done excellently.
A nice double date between Kim, Ron, Bonnie, and Josh. I really enjoyed the "poking" from Kim and Bonnie - very amusing. I definitely wonder how they will all respond when they find out who Josh really is.
I definitely like the way you are writing Josh, and that he genuinely cares for Kim - this is far better than many of the other fics I've read.
acosta perez jose ramiro chapter 12 . 4/15/2020
Excellent job with both couples.

Keep the good writing.
Data Seeker chapter 11 . 4/15/2020

As you know, I’ve been very critical with story structure and other things. I won’t repeat everything I had said in the past, so I’ll make it simple.

The little fluff with Bonnie and Ron is roughly good.

As for the bit with Alpha/Josh, I don’t know. Some details don’t add up, though I suspect you’ll reveal later.

Except for a few words, the wholesome standards are high.

I hope you like this review. God bless

Data Seeker
NeoTyson chapter 12 . 4/15/2020
Another enjoyable chapter that I didn't expect as far as Kim and Ron go on a double date with different significant others. Most times its takes a while for Ron and Josh to bond, but in this case, it went smoothly. Love Bonnie being herself on the date with Ron, with Josh being a nice distraction over it for Kim. That cliffhanger was crazy with Josh/Alpha not messing around.
RKF22 chapter 12 . 4/15/2020
Excellent work can't wait for more
Azure Sky Dance chapter 12 . 4/15/2020
For once I am seeing the boy as the dominant in the bed in a story, with the way Bonnie was wearing basically the slave collar? Dead giveaway, and super hot if the girl is the slave
CajunBear73 chapter 12 . 4/15/2020
From a double date, that almost went Defcon-5 between the two Alpha-Females of MHS, to a seemingly heartfelt goodnight between a Heroine and her Man, a surprising ending as her Man isn't quite who he was portrayed to be...

I get the impression that the night is still 'young' for one of the four who went home that night...

Can't tell how badly this bodes for Josh and, eventually, Kim, but it appears that things are ramping up with plans against Kim, specifically, and Team Possible, in general.

Should be one heck of a next chapter or two...

David Falkayn chapter 11 . 4/14/2020
Nice little plot twist with Josh as Ron is forced to adapt to the new conditions and limitations placed on him. Nicely done.
vanhellsing9000 chapter 11 . 4/14/2020
Damn im loving this story shego excepting ron as her equal bonnie and kim kinda getting alone and now josh as a secret agent its got the works the only thing missing is bonnie ron and shego in a threeway relationship lol anyhoo looking forward to the next chapter to come out keep up the great work
OldAccountThatIsNotUsed5770 chapter 11 . 4/13/2020
Amazing chapter, Hopefully Ron will will finish with the weights soon and be able to return to regular life. The other side of Josh has finally come out, will be interesting to see how this plays out.
acosta perez jose ramiro chapter 11 . 4/12/2020
Wow, Josh's scene was quite the surprise.

Keep the good writing.
DJ Rodriguez chapter 11 . 4/12/2020
Short, but sweet and intriguing! So there is much more to Josh than meets the eye, and also Bonnie and Kim are starting to appreciate Ron more as he starts to do his best in protecting the duo. I have to say, this is interesting!

Happy Easter and God bless you! Keep it up!
NeoTyson chapter 11 . 4/12/2020
Nothing wrong with short updates for some just be glad to see something that's more than 1,000 words. I like the in-depth thought process from Bonnie's pov and shows how far she came as a character in this story. So there's more to Josh than Kim realize, as Ron has said he's one letter close to monkey and not in a good way.
CajunBear73 chapter 11 . 4/12/2020
Something perilous this way comes...

Hope Ron's ready for it, Bonnie's truce holds out and Kim's not totally blinded by the distraction that's being setup to send her into a holding pattern with the baddies.

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