Reviews for Hidden Affections
Zorobak chapter 26 . 6/21/2021
This story is worth waiting for this chapter was worth the wait.
Mizugami18 chapter 10 . 3/11/2021
these bracelets sound like spirit cuffs from Yu Yu Hakusho
Imperious115 chapter 1 . 3/10/2021
I learned from ducky on NCIS that being at the bottom of the totem pole is actually a good thing and a great honor because your the foundation for later generations.
GunBlade2023 chapter 25 . 2/26/2021
Hi there

Nice touch with the monkey king, I am glad you put him in, since most if this things happening is about monkeys :-)

Keep up the great writing and stay safe!
acosta perez jose ramiro chapter 25 . 2/24/2021
Trapping Yono inside a sword? Smart move.

Great idea about having the original Monkey King helping Ron too.

Keep the good writing.
BoredKing chapter 25 . 2/24/2021
Yep, definitely like DBZ. Smart of Ron to deal Yono rather than kill him.
RKF22 chapter 25 . 2/24/2021
GunBlade2023 chapter 24 . 2/6/2021
Hi there

What a cliffhanger, I hope that Ron have comeback for this...

Anyway ,keep up the great writing and stay safe!
BoredKing chapter 24 . 2/4/2021
"She took several more swipes at Yono and hear plasma seemed to roar with each one." Should be "her" not "hear."

'Yono said from his throat, once again as if the situation was simply interesting instead of the lethal combat it was interesting instead of the dangerous contest it was meant to be.' You wrote the same thing twice.

'Soon the spire dissipated and they saw something of a black spot in the sky.' This sentence has too many unnecessary words. it messes it up. Remove 'something of a. The for of energy seeped into Yono's body and any minor hint of damage was eradicated.' I have no clue what you meant with 'for.'

'Any blows of his that managed to slip through weren't doing nearly enough as much damage as they would like them to'. The entire second half is kind of a jumbled mess. 'Any blows of his that managed to slip through weren't doing nearly enoughor as much, pick one) damage as he would like them to.'

Not too many errors but these really threw me off since I had to stop and decipher what I had just read. There's no need to rush, just write at your leisure.
BoredKing chapter 24 . 2/3/2021
You should clean this chapter up a bit, the fight is nice and all but all the errors really ruin it.
acosta perez jose ramiro chapter 24 . 2/3/2021
Whoa, what a cliffhanger.

The 'Hulk vs Loki' beating is an instant classic, uh? Also, cool touch about making Yono a magical Frieza, having a real, more powerful form.

Keep the good writing.
RKF22 chapter 24 . 2/3/2021
e.cash963 chapter 15 . 2/1/2021
45.3 kg equals 99.66 lbs
GunBlade2023 chapter 23 . 1/31/2021
Hi there

The Ron man got some Ron shine in this chapter for real :-)

Keep up the great writing and stay safe!
RKF22 chapter 23 . 1/30/2021
Excellent work can't wait for more
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