Pros and cons about the story
1: 1,000,001 references to Asian food
as though we should all know and care aboutt the hundred and one different shit food they eat
I visited Japan a couple years ago left the holiday but the foood was Overpriced dissgusting shit
Even when I found MacDonald's and thought I found civilisation they still FUCK it up

2: Naked preteens girls
completely unacceptable to have as a repeating Bringing up
And the claim is just naked fun is disturbing

3: your main character Harry Potter belief is alwaays bllooody right
from spending 25,000 galleons on a sshopkeeper shop he just met five minutes beforehannd to casually blowing money and somehow expecting to make money by naamedropping that shop in the new paper and nott demonstrate any concern or sleeppless night Over ssuch a major decision

The level of arrogancce is unnchallenged

4: his supposing daughter
So you have somehow allowed allowed Harry Potter to adopt And when he suppose a daughter comes to school he thinks they cheeky behaviour is gooing to go unchallenged
a: destroying the sorting hat
b: Sharing a room together
c: generally being Bloodyy loud and annoying

For the staff the school to allow tthis behaviour to go unchallenged is a major slippery slope

Great read! Devoured this in a day and I’m so pumped for the next installment. I love the dedication and care you have put into your world

Poor dobby

Your writing is absolutely breathtaking and stunning, amazingly perfect and fun to read. You make stringing words together to sentences seem so easy! Your RPG world is still fantastic, the characters are just crazy, ideas are brilliant, beautiful and brilliant. Thank you very much for sharing!

Thank you.

To be honest, there are a lot of things that I don't like about this story. The Ron and Dumbledore bashing (yes, it is bashing), Harry's numerous murders (in your first story I said that he did not commit murder when he killed Quirrell, but he made up for it in this story), the whole idea of a dragon becoming a girl with savant magical powers. Your strange fascination with food which often derailed the story for long stretches. And of course the excessively long, indulgent and unnecessary author's notes (I know some people like AN's; I'm not one of them).

Yet after all that, I rather liked the story. The interaction among the long list of characters is the strength of the story, and even though you have a lot of characters, I don't feel like there are too many. The idea of Harry accessing a different type of magic that he developed on his own due to the trials of his childhood is great. I highly value creativity, and you have that in droves. You are willing to take chances with your writing and more often than not they work out.

I'm probably not in the normal demographic of your readers, as I have no particular interest in RPG, guns, food or excessive violence. Yet you managed to retain my interest throughout and earned a thumbs up. Good luck on the third story, and I am glad to hear that you are basically leaving canon behind. We really don't need more Triwizard Tournament scenes in fanfiction, although I recognize the possibilities of Harry fighting the dragon in the first task. Liv would be able to give him some pointers. G.

Dobby's death is strictly in character. Dumbledore and Snape could be on the slippery edge.

The time travel used in the potterverse seems to be the type where they time travel because they've already traveled. It's already set in space-time so events fall in such a way that they have to use the time-turner. That still doesn't remove the possibility of alternate timelines, but does seemingly prevent the destruction of your current/future self since it creates a nice and neat time loop.

I would just like to say that you are, without a doubt, a fantastic writer. I finished your first book yesterday, and the second today-both of which, were phenomenal. Thank you, for your dedication and your commitment towards this series. Normally, I am one for romance but your summary had peeled my interest. And thus, I was pleasantly surprised by how efficiently you had caught my interest in book one. My only complaint would be the first chapter in book one when you kept referencing Hagrid, the keeper of keys. It was funny at first but the repetition annoyed me to the point where I almost abandoned the story until you had Harry speak. I am so happy I didn’t, and gave this series a chance. I adore how you presented Harry, he was just so funny! Alas, I cannot convey in words how well you have developed your characters throughout your stories and am looking foreword to book three.
Have a wonderful day, stay safe, and don’t be afraid to message me if you need help with anything and or ideas for the story.
Lu

My Mom worked at a restaurant around that time and she says the cooks and the dish washers weren't tipped. Was the system diferent in other parts of the United States?

"Hit it with something heavy until it stops moving."
Preach it, sister

Snape actually has a pretty good cover as a double agent. He was originally a bad guy, murdered a bunch of people, 'tricked' the good side into trusting him, hates HP with every fiber of his being, blames Dumbledore for not protecting Lilly, invented a couple of dark spells (with is much more impressive in-cannon), provides valuable information and services in undermining the good side and is overall one of the most competent bad guys.
Examples?
He weakened HP's mind for V to manipulate.
He killed freaking Dumbledore.
He provided V with accurate information on when HP is moving out of Privett Drive.
He secured the Sword of Gryffindor in Gringotts so it can't be used on the Horcruxes (false but V doesn't know)

I thought Harry always had his tongues spell active.

Oh, so this is an anime. Silly me, should've realised earlier *facepalm*

"Best friend"? Is it not "only friend" anymore?