|Reviews for Through A Pale Door|
| Pheonix chapter 1 . 5/18/2003
I love this. You have got to write more.
| Imzadi chapter 1 . 5/18/2003
I hope this is just the first chapter of much more. It's exciting, original, and well written. There is one fairly common mistake that you make, though (would you believe I'm an English teacher?). "Me, Michael, Tom, & Eric thought" Actually, that's a double mistake. It takes the subjective "I", not the objective "me," and it should come at the end of the series: "Michael, Tom, Eric, and I thought." "Only me, Michael, and your parents know" should be "Only Michael, your parents, and I know." Common mistake, but like a small flaw on a beautiful painting.
So maybe Angel & company will need some lawyerly help. Maybe some ex-Wolfram & Hart lawyerly help? Maybe Lindsey?
| seth chapter 1 . 5/17/2003
good job, do more soon plez?
| Tariq chapter 1 . 5/17/2003