Reviews for Too Many Champions |
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![]() ![]() I really like your version of the 'Voldie in the cauldron' return. So apropos! |
![]() ![]() ![]() so voldy was at the tasks but never did them because he was a parasite riding the back of a minnions head again |
![]() ![]() ![]() this is dumb voldy has had no magic since the first task since by not showing up and not taking part in the task the goblet would have stripped him of his magic. if that did not do it then not showing up and taking part in the 2nd task would have taken his magic for a 2nd time. this story makes no damn sense at all |
![]() ![]() ![]() oh look voldy did not show up for the task again there is now no damn way he should have any magic at all |
![]() ![]() ![]() ok why does voldy have a body still he never took part in the first task meaning he no longer has any magic meaning his made up baby body would fall apart from no magic to hold it together |
![]() ![]() ![]() will since voldy and peter never showed for the task they no longer have magic any more and voldy baby body should be rotting and falling apart since it's made out of magic and he no longer has any to keep it from falling apart. |
![]() ![]() ![]() wrong the use of any unforgivable is a 100% automatic one way trip to dementor island for life no exceptions |
![]() ![]() So well done. It straddles that fine line between beautiful writing and crack-fic |
![]() ![]() ![]() Such a funny chapter. The timing of the comments of the officials is hilarious. Thank you for a good laugh |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Well thought out, great meta commentary, and hilarious! I haven't laughed like this in a long time! |
![]() ![]() ![]() . . . Harmony Ranger . . . laughing out loud! I love it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Warningg: spoilers. I've read "Voldemort draws the magic out of death eaters while he is dying" before. That said, this is unique in several ways: the mistake Crouch Jr made about Harry, having Hermione in the tournament, the location and time of the ritual, and the timing of outside events. In other words, this story is very different from most I've read. I thoroughly enjoyed it. You have a good mix of description and dialog, and events flow well and naturally. Thank you for sharing this, and I'm going to look if you've written any more! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I can see some thinking that Harry and Hermione should be more suspicious of Moody. But the one I'm suspicious of is Crabbe. He's too competent too quickly, and after all, there is still a contestant who hasn't shown up yet. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thanks for sharing your story with us. |