Reviews for The Journey of Souls |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Hello, Interesting story- thanks for sharing it! I have problem though: is this a novel or movie script? If you write a good story and write it good: we will be able to figure out the point of view, the mood of the character… If they act frightening… and written well, we will be frightened… If you have to add editorial guidelines… |
![]() ![]() Hinata gaining her past lives memories, nope I'm out. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hmm, seems things are developing nicely can't wait to see more so keep up the great work! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Kushina should've been dead |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really liked this one. The Hokage knows he got off easy and I'm excited to see Tsunade join the mission, but if she's joining it won't they face a lot less trouble with her by their side. Just my thought. Also good to see Ino is now caught up on Yakumo and Hanabi's plan, all that's left is for Hinata to approve. Which is an interesting question, will she share or will that be too difficult for her as she's loved Naruto for as long as she can remember. Eitherway looking forward to what happens next. |
![]() ![]() ![]() So going on their first mission. I'm curious to see how this team will fair compared to how team 7 did in the cannon. Super glad Tsunade has joined the party been looking forward to this for a while. Also the third Hokage is in for a world of hurt. Hope he's got good hospital insurance. I'm also glad the rest of the girls want to tell Hinata their plan before they do anything, because no matter how they look at it she noticed and loved Naruto first. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very good. Im enjoying Mikoto as their team captain. Despite now being friends with her clan shes still pusing Naruto and his friends like any leader should. I fear for the next part lf her journey however, because something tells me she’s going to lose her son completely soon. I wonder how sasuke will react when he finds out the person who pushed him away from the Uchiha is an Uchiha |
![]() ![]() ![]() Another great chapter. I do fear for how Naruto will react upon meeting Kushina, but hopefully it doesn’t end too badly. Then again I feel Naruto has also gained a mother in Hinata’s so that might even lead to greater rejection. I’m also looking forward to Naruto meeting Tsunade because them being Aunt and Nephew is a dynamic I’m eager to see and I feel that Naruto will be less cold to her because she didn’t even know of their relation. I’m also surprised at the way the romance is going. I honestly thought it would just be Naruto/Hinata/Hanabi but looks like Naruto might also have a relationship with Ino and Yakumo. And from what you hinted at maybe even Shizuka. I think Men are going to be more jealous then women |
![]() ![]() ![]() Sasuke is really dragging this fic down. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I missed this story, I can't wait for the next events |
![]() ![]() ![]() This story so far needs a lot of work, i would try to find an english speaking and writing betareader, as someone from the US, reading this makes my brain hurt with all the grammatical errors. I'm putting this as a review of the latest chapter, but I'm on chapter 8. You should re-edit this whole story so it can be read without causing migraines. Other than that, I absolutely looove this plotline, and not many people take naruto's on path's susch as this. As of now, I give this story a 5.5/10, shows promise, but could be alot better. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Definitely not liking the way conversations started to be written in this chapter. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This really needs a spelling check. |
![]() ![]() ![]() So his mom is actually alive but abandoned him? |
![]() ![]() ![]() The last couple chapter I've noticed some changes. You no longer write "he/she said, he/she asked, etc." Now it's —speaker. It kinda detracts from the overall story, makes it more...mechanical. And you've also started to mix up pronouns. He or his when your talking about one of the girls |