WRITE MORE! NOW!

I'm waiting . . . .

Hurry up! *whines*

Great story, write more soon!

more more more more more more more more!

Well that was an interesting note. And yes, I was also wondering about the Yukina thing . . . that would mean that Yukina and hiei are half-siblings (I've heard that they are in some places . . . I don't know since I havent' seen the episodes with his past either I don't know! I know the jist of it but not the hard facts really - you know, all the technicalities with who got whose genes, twins or not, half or full siblings, etc.) because only Kurama would be their connection - the mother of Hiei died after giving birth to him and Kurama was her first time so she never even mated with koorime, and technically couldn't either cuz koorimes are all female so Kurama is the link. Then you'd have to conjure up some story about how he mated with an ice maiden, but the complicated part would be how to make it so that Hiei knew that yukina was his sister without knowing his father - you said so yourself that other families took him in and told him false stories about his past - you must clarify these stories and then have Kurama expolain how they're not true as well as explaining how the families knew to tell him he had a sister - how they knew that without knowing or divulging who the father was (Kurama). However, another problem with the whole thing about how Kurama is the connection is the issue with Yukina's eyes - they're red like a fire demons, no? Do koorimes have red eyes? (see what I mean? all the facts about koorimes and Hiei and Yukina's sibling thing are muddled! GAH!) If so, then it's not a problem but if not, then it would be because why would Yukina have red eyes if none of her parents did? But to have the girl fire demon mother be the connection would totally contradict what you just wrote (how it was her first and only time)! In addition,... oh shoot I forgot what I was going to say. Anyway, that's quite a mess you've gotten yourself into I'm afraid, and avoiding the problem altogtether is not an option. You have your work cut out for you! _;; Anyway, I'm also reviewing (although this isn't a chapter) to give you support because this is a GREAT story and I understand how hard this chapter is - I wioll be patient and I commend you for trying. Think of how proud you'll be when you've managed to overcome this difficulty! We'll have to dedicate something to you for your hard work! But first you have to write it _! I wish you good luck on overcoming this obstacle and I will wait for the next chapter as long as it takes (just try to do it in a few months or so, not a year . . . well, we'll have to see...) Keep writing! Feel free to email me if you want additional help, I'll be glad to be of service to you! .~ Till next time!

Natalie

THIS STORY IS THE BEST! The end of ch.4 had me BALLING! Keep up the good work! !

Well, I think if u r going to make Kurama Hiei's father, Kurama would have to be kinda fire demon too (from where Hiei got his powers) but u don't need to worry about Yukina cuz she was produced asexually, so no father. I really enjoyed your fanfic! please write more! -

i absolutly love the way you portray kurama, i think you have his personality down perfectly. Hiei's too. It was a very original idea making kurama hiei's father, though i have to say i am a bit disapointed that its not yaoi, hehehe what can i say i think kurama and hiei make the perfect couple. i still love the story and your style of writing. keep up the good work! and earlier you mentioned how you might write a fanfic with them being a couple, well i look forward to that!

YOU'RE KILLING ME. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE SOON! YOUR STORY KICKS ASS! I've read it several times and i'm still not tired of it, but the more times i read it the more i want you to update. this is my all time favorite fanfic ever (and i read alot of fanfiction, hell i even write fanfiction) and yours is the best. the whole kurama is hiei's father thing is so original and cool. although after reading it several times i really don't see how you will explain kurama's being hiei's and yukina's father. i mean kurama's a fox, hiei's a fire demon and yukina is an ice demon, how are you going to explain it? it's driving me mad(in case you haven't noticed i have no life) SO YOU HAVE TO UPDATE SOON! GREAT, SUPER, FANTASTIC, KICK ASS STORY. and i like the fact that you came up with an original idea instead of having kurama and hiei being lovers. good for you, creativity is such a wonderful thing.

I just love the ending for this chapter!

"you're a real pain in the ass sometimes."

"you've taught me well."

Most people make Kurama some prim and proper shrink who can't crack a joke! This is really good. update soon!

Hey there again! (i must be so annoying . . .) Ahem, anyway, I just wanted to say what a good chapter this was. The conversation at the beginning between yusuke and Kurama was a clever way to introduce the situation without saying it completely outright - well, you know what i mean, right? anyway, i also liked the opening part of the scene betwen Yukina and hiei - when Yukina is making tea and the whole spark thing and then hiei's slight interruption, etc. His description was good (how he looked and his tiredness) - esp. the part about how at peace he felt with his sister's enrgy healing him both in- ex-ternally. The whole conversation proceeding that was also very well written, and i won't pick out each part I lioked (the whole thing)! It would watste your time. Anyway, I also thought that at the end when you return to the same scenario with Kurama and yusuke (later on, obviously) it is clever how you return to the same setting as you did in the beginning of this chapter - Kurama's house, the mom discussion, only Kurama and Yusuke, talk about Hiei, etc. - very similar and seems to insinuate some kind of cycle - which is quite appropriate since ANOTHER dilema is coming into the picture. This 'cycl' idea of returning back to where you started (but still have some progression) was also used in the book "Of Mice and Men" by John Steinbeck (may sound boring but it is a REALLY good book - I mean, I wasn't interested at first and it may seem to be pointless but it has so many meanings it could take days to decipher!) - he had the same scene at the beginning and at the end of his book (when you read it if you haven't already you'll know) and it works in a similar way that your version of this technique does.

Okay, so i've reviewed all of your chapters (i think). YOU BETTER WRITE ANOTHER CHAPTER SOON BECAUSE I REALLY WANT TO READ IT AS IM SURE OTHERS DO TO! No, seriously, please update soon! I can';t wait for another chapetr! Keep writing!

This chapter was GREAT! I loved the part where Hiei makes the noise to not scare Yukina and how when hiei lands in front of them cuz Yukina called his first quewstion when he sees Kuwabara is "Is he bothering you?" - so typical! I also like the part where when Kuwabara mentioned the 'boys stuff' thing both hiei and Yukina were at a loss for words! Again, the typical cluelessness of two other worldly demons to human terms! I also enjoyed the entire conversation between hiei and Kuwabara - it was EXTREMELY well done and I couldn't just pick out one part that was particularly effective because the entiure thing was! The suicide bit at the end was quite a stunner but again another good part - esp. when reinforced by the whole blood-licking thing before. At the very end of the chapter Hiei struggling with himself was also WONDERFULLY executed and I'd just like to commend you on writing such a difficult piece such as this story without so much as a trace of OOCness (or if there is, its not major or particularly noticable). I really am enjoying this story (added it to my favorites as well as my authors list) and I have read it a couple of times by now without getting tired of it. And don't think i'm just saying this - I really mesn it. I'll contiue onto the next chapeter now and if you really don't like getting a lot of my reviews (like ifnthey're cluttering up your spoace and time) just ask and i will. Thanks for letting us readers enjoy such a great piece of writing!

Hey its natalie! I would've reviewed sooner but I was at camp for three weeks so . . *shrugs and grins* I'm back! Anyway, I thought that because this is SUCH a good story and you are SUCH a good writer that I would review each chapter separately (even if I've read them all already). Now to business...

Wow! I loved the part in the beginning where Shiori explains that she knows about Kurama's 'nickname' - that is so typical of Kurama to do thjat, esp. since his friends (namely Yusuke and co.) mess up his human name. That was REALLY clever and likely of Kurama to do - nice input! Also I thoguht the entire converstaion between Kuwabara and Kurama was EXCELLENTLY done and not a trace of OOCnes as far as I can see! I esp. loved it when Kurama forces Kuwabara to ask Hiei and then you go on to explain his devious plan and how Kuwabara (as opposed to anyone else, including himself) was better suited for the job of talking to hiei about his sister. That was INCREDIBLY good insight - I would have never even thought of it but here you are thinking up such a logical explanation and writing it well! I coulkd go into further detail about how good it was but I'll stop here to say that the entire chapter was a joy to read - you have a writing talent and don't you deny it! Now, to review the next chapter!

*laughs* Kurama is so coy, isn't he? And Hiei FINALLY TOLD! Yay!

your story is amazing! it is so original, i love it. it is very well written and keeps the reader begging for more, or is that just me? please update soon becuase i'm dying to find out what happens next. i'm also interested in how you will explain how kurama is hiei's father. great fic, keep up the fantastic work.

I think that hiei should have cryed but other than that it was great!

Wow, I think this was my fav. chappie so far.I WISH THIS COULD HAPPEN IN THE REAL YU YU HAKUSHO!in my oppinon you SHOULD own yu yu hakusho. did you ever concider sending this to the makers of yu yu?I would it sound much better that the orignal story line for yu yu hakusho(even though I havn't seen it all, but I get the basic pic.)Please update soon !.

Flames and Fur,

DemonCat