I like a lot about this fic and turned updates on to see what happens in the plot next, but the grammar / sentence structure is really weird toward the last few chapters. I’ll read the next fic too, but am curious what kind of editor you write in that it doesn’t catch there vs their in context!

I’m so happy that you’re thinking of making a novel, your writing and storytelling is amazing️️

I was asking my self the entire time we’re was anakin skywalker in all this. But I thought maybe he’s with his mom living a nicer life. With his step father and the Lars. I was thinking maybe they will got back to that planet and see if they’re more force sensitives they could have missed. Make him a Jedi. Cute little brother. Then you mentioned that plague guy had a new apprentice but you mentioned clones so I thought that was it. But nooooo. Anakin abviously had to come out some how.

Totally had me going until the end. I thought maybe that guy will be kenobis long lost brother and he will accept his brother to marry the queen in his place.

I’m so addicted to this. I can’t wait for the next part. Just to see what will happen... Will the twins be born? Is she pregnant right now with kenobi’s kids? Will she die like in the alternate universe? Did Anakin kill her ex in jealousy or so she would fall for him in grief? Will she ever ever be happy and be together with her one true love! ️

So many conflicting feelings. Loved your story. I can tell how much work you did and how the love of this story just jumps off the page. Thank you for sharing it with all of us.
Can’t wait for an update in any of your stories.

I’m officially a Padme/Kenobi lover now.

This story is fantastic thus far. I'm so glad I found it, and I practically couldn't put it down while reading. Keep up the good work, and I look forward to whatever comes next!

Wow! Just finished reading this lovely work and I applaud you :)) Yeah I noticed the occasional spelling and grammar stuff, but sometimes they're unintentionally hilarious when you accidentally swap one word for another with similar sounds/spelling but vastly different meaning XD
Gotta say I wasn't on board with rey/maul or padme/obi (being an obi/satine shipper if anything myself) but your characters made me believe it and it was well done, with both of them. I am looking forward to anakin/obi/padme relations moving forward, esp. with a full tilt evil anakin. I think i'll miss his and obi-wan's good relationship, but this does open exciting opportunities. And that reveal! Well done, lol, I was also like 'where is anakin?' but this is very interesting and now i'm intrigued what our misguided chosen one did, growing up not at all with the jedi and without the foundations obi-wan and the order gave him originally.
Good job on making rey palpatine compelling! Quite a feat disney could take notes from... XD You even managed to make her mary-sueness not as annoying. Also my new favorite character is Ahsona Kenobi.
The prose throughout it well written and a very enjoyable read 3
I was also impressed with how you integrated a lot of other characters (like dooku, ventress, feral/savage, feemor) from seemingly tangential storylines but melded them smoothly with the primary plot after their introduction.
My favorite bit (off the top of my head) was the deconstruction of the jedi temple, and that whole scene. Tugged on the heartstrings, that!
Overall, kudos! wonderfully written, beautiful character work, and inspired and very tight plot!

A little question will Anakin Have any relevance ir will he appears ay any time at the Future

OMG! WTF?! WHAT IN THE KRIFFING HADES?! ok now that I got that out of my system. yay sidious is dead, yay clones are semi safe. maul is awesome, having Rey as a mate is definitely different and I love it. I need more Rey stories in my life apparently. but then I drop that bomb... that 1929374 ton BOOM that just...OMG. so he is being trained by plaugus (or however you spell it lol, I can't spell today). he's stolen obi-wan’s love, he's about to make himself indispensable to the republic and it's gonna become more empire than they realize. I just... need the next story now lol. this has been an amazing journey and I cannot wait to continue it!

oh my cheese I DIED on that last line! I always wanted him to say that. man this has gotten intense. all the relationship drama (which I GREATLY appreciate) and the plotting and deception by the Sith, the intrigue within the council, the death the love. all of it is amazing. I kinda don't wanna finish it now!

I waited til the end of part one to review because there was just will much happening! and I'm not disappointed by it. the way you worked around the begining of the Clone Wars is awesome but you managed to keep the deception and intrigue in there. I feel Maul is leaning more towards how he was towards the end of Rebels, singularly focused but more in touch with the Force than he was as a blindly following apprentice. he will never be fully in the light but he has a better understanding of the Force. I love seeing more Qui-Gonn and a very different Dooku, a not completely altruistic Yoda, a skeptical Mace. bringing in Mor and Ventress is truly inspired, something I wouldn't have thought of. I will admit to wanting more romance but I understand this tory is more about plot and real character development over silly things like love lol. I cannot wait to get to the next part and see how everything develops from here!

I love everything I just read.
How are you doing it?!

I SCREECHED AT THAT CLIFFHANGER LEMME TELL YOU RIGHT NOW
I THOUGHT HE WASNT GONNA TURN UP BUT THERE HE IS ASDFGHJKL

Ahahaaha some of the one liners are perfect! Yoda and Jinn have some awesome ones

Clones: yay!
Obi-Wan: :'(
Anakin: either Plaguey has been busy or Anakin has gone full Tom Riddle on us; either way, it's bad.
Maul: catharsis, that Highlander and then some experience.
Palps: Yay!
Republic: reminds me of a travel video I once watched about a large (million) Russian city. They used to fish and sell the fish, and then the market went away. But the fish didn't. Nonetheless, the city is extremely poor. Always a mismatch between desires/expectations and reality. That is generally not a good thing.

And we're off!

Interesting outtakes, my favorite was the one with the Jedi discussing tie travel.

Hy! This little snipets were cool, funny and interesting.
Congratulations for the first part of the fanfiction! It was great!
Now I can't wait for the next part that you hint will be darker or harder for the light side.
Thanks again for the time and though that you invest in this. I can't give you ideas or other tipe of criticism because I like the way you write and enjoy the way you manipulate the plot.
See you in the cecuel!