Reviews for Tale of Two Kings: Redux
GreenGun03 chapter 6 . 6/1
Introducing rifle to fifth century era is so crazy.

But why the counter guardians not pruning the change of history?

maybe it is explained in later chapter.
Gear master chapter 1 . 1/14
I haven’t even started yet, and there is already a dragon ball Z abridged reference(I like where this is going)
VamPyr00 chapter 2 . 11/13/2023
"To make it clear, my state of mind was already influenced by the fact that I had skipped breakfast that day, I had forgotten to bring some water bottle or any snacks to keep me energized and... not prone to go this mad." -Exact quote from chapter one.

Ignoring the terrible grammar AND the fact that this is a run-on sentence, it is clear that he had no food or water when he arrived at the cave yesterday. How then, does he have a water bottle and snacks in his pack when he awakens at the castle after the summoning?

The whole first chapter (prologue?) should just be cut out completely. It would make more sense to start the story at the summoning. The 'prologue' was utterly useless in explaining any background and quite boring in general.

The fact that he just accepts his new role immediately and decides he HAS to lead these people in order to survive is ridiculous. His apparent ability to ACTUALLY act like a king and command an army is also absurd for a self-proclaimed 'couch potato'.

The only possible explanation is that he has been summoned as a Servant somehow. This would explain both his language ability AND his sudden ability to act like a king, as he could simply be aided by his Skills. It would also explain his sudden in-depth knowledge of the time period to a certain extent. I just hope that his summoning granted him some combat or magic abilities as well, or else he won't live very long.
D3Diton chapter 17 . 11/2/2023
I was liking this story but then this Scathach stuff happened and now idk, I'm gonna power through but I really don't like how she did that.
NavyZero8745 chapter 64 . 10/15/2023
I highly doubt shirou is new to the bird and the bee’s due to his time as a mercenary and wandering hero plus that time in the war, however I agree with his point at ignoring the problem is hurting the problem however he has hundreds maybe thousands or more years possibly more fighting and killing without his consent and him being a Hero Aspiration and giving up his ties and humanity essentially would of course make it hard for him to development those ties again and even more so if he feels like he doesn’t deserve to, but of course he doesn’t feel that way I mean he gave up on his ties and followed his dream which betrayed him so possibly making him feel like everything he did was for nothing and had to come to terms with that for the rest of his time in eternity.
Suoiresnu-Fan chapter 56 . 7/5/2023
"How things would have been had he been around when I was but a hopeless monarch myself?"

(You know, I want to read up on this — you don’t need to write up a whole damn story like the one here; just snippets ought to suffice…)
Suoiresnu-Fan chapter 54 . 7/5/2023
Guess it’s time to read up on those 'Scathach-Skadi' doujinshi again~!
Blaze972 chapter 1 . 6/27/2023
Grammar and flow is terrible, not sure about the later chapters but the beginning needs serious work.
KuroKatBone chapter 2 . 6/20/2023
I did not expect the author to be who they are since I just get straight into reading most of the time, consider me surprised
Xavier Arias Gonsalves chapter 26 . 5/1/2023
You know, I never thought about it before. But if possible, you should make a story based on these short stories of Joseph and them lot into a whole journey/story. I don't know why it only came to me just now but that shit would be awesome. Although, primarily for Jojo and Ria's friendship/love.
Goldenexperience420 chapter 1 . 4/26/2023
to sikvelsigma. I dont mean to be the gun grammar police,but what you mean is not a clip. THAT is a mag
zuyiko wolf chapter 2 . 3/31/2023
don't take The Lord's name in vain
zuyiko wolf chapter 1 . 3/31/2023
Don't take The Lord's name in vain
GymNatty321 chapter 66 . 2/3/2023
I agree with the guy below, tragedy is a staple of the Fate series. Without it the story feels different.
Gentlemen Rance-T.M chapter 66 . 2/1/2023
"Sue"8, Quality8, length7.5, Plot5.5. The story got a little too horny near the end while overlookable it's just "hollow" in a sense, Joseph just doesn't feel like he actually struggles(no, He doesn't fail) He just shows up and does the magic dance, says the magic word(s) and now he's the emperor of a whole world without any really opposition or corruption of his mind, granted he trained but so have countless others. Personally really, it lacking in a source/sense of "tragedy" that makes "Fate" so compelling.
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