|Reviews for Revolution|
| Chad Owen chapter 1 . 6h
Don’t know if you’ll see this but your story is being copied on Webnovel. They’re calling naruto. domination
| Dissapointed chapter 4 . 11/24
I can't judge if the story is good or not from 4 chapters but what I have seen thus far is honestly kinda a mixed bag.
The story seems okay. The writing quality seems fine.
The problem is the MC. He is dumb.
Imagine growing up in a ninja village and deciding to steal. You'd have to be a monumental idiot to think the ninjas would not notice.
Imagine being a reincarnated person who was an adult in his last life and taking 'Eatslug' as your surname. The author probably thought he was being funny. Unfortunately, his sense of humor sucks. He should not be making jokes. It makes the story worse.
It's really simple. The dude won't be 5 yo kid all his life. Imagine wanting to date a girl and telling her your name is 'Eatslug'. I'd be ashamed as hell. To think this dipshit would actually CHOSE to be called that... yeah. The author has no respect for his MC so why should I as his reader be different? What expectations can I have for this kind of MC?
The bigger problem is how the MC just... didn't even try. He spent years in Academy and it was just a timeskip. Which is fine. But the MC knows how to train chakra control. Or that depleting chakra should increase his reserves. But he didn't even try doing that. Years wasted.
Is this how a dude who knows that there will be Madara, Obito, and Kaguya popping out of the woodwork in the future?
Like... he can kill himself right now and it wouldn't make any difference with that kind of attitude. For all the talk that his life is the most important to him, the MC doesn't even bother trying to get better.
| Soraslove chapter 8 . 11/12
Wow, a harsh guy... interesting.
| Martin-di-Arcov chapter 50 . 10/24
i love Hashirama going full on "Brother" on Tobirama and lecturing him for being impolite
it's kinda weird how rare it is for Fics to have Hashirama and Tobirama interacting like proper siblings
| Guest chapter 1 . 9/9
This started pretty good then went to shit after chapter 35
| Ahtu chapter 1 . 7/30
You'd be very wrong. The probably most horrific slew of human experiments were conducted by the Japanese(yes, even worse than the nazi's). So while the US may have greater power, and have done more large scale fcked up things - The Japanese take the cake for doing both some of the worst human experiments, and some of the worst war crimes(although I suspect Cambodia, Soviet Russia, and North Korea have them beat on both fronts - A lot of that info is hard to get specifics on. But things like Cannibal Island, and Road of Bones can give you an idea). Most of which started during WW2, but a lot of the human experiments continued all the way into the 1980's or 1990's as I recall. Most of them conducted on that same horror-show of an island.
| TroxX101 chapter 50 . 6/26
| Guest chapter 16 . 5/20
I love how the MC stresses on the fact that he is a acary strong ninja when Kakashi - of all people - regularly destroys him in spars…it doesn’t add up. Kakashi is strong but he isn’t that strong. The fact that the MC is miles weaker than Kakashi is outstanding and telling of how much hubris the MC has — declaring himself to be scary strong. He is like Kurenai in that regard, very weak but thinks of themselves as strong.
| Guest chapter 8 . 5/20
This MC utterly sucks. He is arrogant and extremely weak, he does not have the power to back up his arrogance. He has already lived an entire life before this one, so why is he so naive? He’s dumb and clearly lacking in intellectual capacity. He tried to manipulate the third hokage and immediately got exposed for doing so. I am not reading a fic with an MC that does not have a brain and is arrogant too. I’ll give this fic two more chapters and if the MC doesn’t show noticeable improvement in his intelligence then I’m fully dropping it. This MC thinks he is Ayanokoji when he is, in actuality, levels below an unmotivated Ryuenn.
| professorlight23 chapter 50 . 5/9
Kakuzu: this aura! you are hashirama
| professorlight23 chapter 34 . 5/9
| professorlight23 chapter 23 . 5/9
did he just slightly hint about the infinite tsukoyomi when he release the matrix
| Guest chapter 45 . 4/13
So, was Ino dead or nah? I really love reading ur story, but sometimes you got carried away with the cryptic writing bruv
| HellsMaji chapter 1 . 4/4
"Maybe I simply had I had simply/I'd simply been struck down by an aneurism aneurysm and reborn into the body of a Japanese. Which was worrying, but workable with Which while worrying, was still workable/Which was worrying, but workable."
Holy fucking Jesus, what even is that paragraph?
| mbrevig chapter 8 . 3/31
Your writing is all over the place.