Reviews for Game of Thrones: The Targaryen Awakens |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Okay, I really love Catelyn's punishment. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Helluva good start; I can't wait to see sweet Catelyn burn. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Catapulting chains and collars.. even though you attempt to show this as an act of breaking one's chains and settling to freedom, chains and collars being flung at such speeds would probably injure or kill someone easily. Metal slices flesh with ease. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Not gonna lie, your dialogue seems a bit stiff. You use periods a bit too frequently for what could be completed as a whole sentence, and not two instead. Also, your characters seem emotionally unbelievable. That other John guy did not question Jon Snow, or Aegon, as he is now called. Your characters just feel.. emotionally stiff. You try to use emotions in your writing, but your writing doesn't invoke the emotions that the characters are supposed to feel. Also, once again, suspicion and general common sense seem to be suspended for a bit here. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Okay…your AN is a bit wrong. Teens DID and do have sex at that age. Still enjoying this on a re-read but yeah. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Why do refer to Loras as Mace Tyrell's heir!? Willas and Garlan are in line before him. Its why his family is okay with him being a knight because as a third son he doesn't stand to inherent much. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Gotta stop reading here. The cringe is just too much |
![]() ![]() ![]() This was a very interesting and entertaining story. Your take on the characters as well as the plot was fascinating. Thank you so very much for sharing this with us! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thanks for the nice story. A little too much deux ex machina tho. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thx for the chapter |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awesome |
![]() ![]() ![]() Pretty nice |
![]() ![]() ![]() Interesting |
![]() ![]() Finished reading it I just wish JonAegon has a lightsaber and meet Count Dooku for a last time |
![]() ![]() So why does JonAegon has a Valyrian steel sword instead of a lightsaber? |