|Reviews for Fire Demon|
| Cookieeees4042 chapter 4 . 11/7/2016
...and Marcia all like
T.T ...my show lol
| Axyraandas chapter 12 . 10/18/2016
Marcia is too cute. Really, having trouble with a childproof lock then blithely passing it off as normal. So cute. Besides that, your varied characters are quite nice. I like Patches's strange interactions with terrestrial magic, and the backdrop of sci-fi that peeks through in a culture that finds it so foreign (namely Hogwarts). The Lord of Chaos is pretty orderly, considering we can actually visualize him without mindbending physical contradictions. I know his appearance is just a mask, but seeing chaos itself would be pretty nice sometime. What's remaining of Voldemort would take notes and up his game, I'd expect. But... Despite this, there's doesn't feel like there's a sense of urgency or timescale to this. With a book, one can gauge the end with the number of pages left. With a completed story, the number of chapters. With this... It's sequential and coherent and delightful and almost entirely typo-free (which I appreciate), but there's no arc villain, there's no laid out plan that gets upset at every turn, there's no crescendo, there's no tension. There's angst and determination and frightful power, but the Beast has few natural enemies, and the demons and demonlings are alien to Hogwarts. Perhaps Marcie could be threatened by a squad of Death Eaters, or Voldie could try to possess a family member (and probably fail). Maybe the Beast leaves a few doors open and alternate character interpretations stroll in for a "chat." Something to anticipate, something to dread. ...I see why outlines are useful now.
| dloold87 chapter 5 . 8/16/2016
congrats you ruined the story by involving the inbred toad fucker and her ass drinking toadies, by allowing them to walk all over a FUCKING DEMON! sorry but you lost me in this chapter.
| Thundramon chapter 12 . 6/16/2016
I just read this fic and am extremely impressed with the list of strong & unique characters you have created.
I love the characterizations of Marcia, Ria & Lord Chaos. Patches & Nandin are growing on me as well.
I doubted Marcia as a mother figure till chapter 11 but her literally running into an inferno to save Harry clinched it for me. Her doubts about herself, her failure to change her self destructive behaviour earlier & Lord Chaos's approval of her guardianship of Harry are all swept away in blaze of protectiveness to save Harry from being treated as less than the 'human' he is.
Poor Harry having those numbers carved on his arm. It doesn't change the fact that he is now stigmatised as a dark creature regardless of whether the numbers are erased or not. I really wish the number incident never happened but it was Marcia's Crowning moment of Motherhood.
Umbridge as always is a horrid monstrous woman. I wish Marcia had killed her & every other bigot there. Dumbledore & Remus should be punished as well for letting the carving happen to Harry.
Why did Marcia let Umbridge come near Harry again if she knew they already tried to kill her & Harry once?
I notice you are still creating other stories & I plan to read your other works. I hope they are all as amazing as this story.
Thanks for writing this story so far, it was a tremendously enjoyable ride. I hope you return back to this story & begin updating it again.
| TheGreatAnimeYoukai chapter 12 . 1/8/2016
I normally hate OCs. This story makes an outstanding exception to my perfectly justifiable hatred. I love all of your characters and can't wait for the next chapter.
| Charlie0925 chapter 12 . 11/25/2013
Please, please, PLEASE come back to this fic!
Truly awesome writing hun, I adore this harry and the other characters you have created here and I truly cannot wait to read more! ;o)
| Fading to Black chapter 4 . 11/4/2013
I laughed until I couldnt breathe, this was hilarious.
| pikachucat chapter 12 . 10/21/2013
awesome more please
| AllieOfGreenGables chapter 12 . 10/15/2013
This is pretty amazing. I'd come up with more eloquent words, but they've all been taken by your lovely story. I am in awe.
| Shinkicker chapter 12 . 6/25/2012
Cool story, quite humorous at that as well. I have to ask though, are the non-HP characters fom another story or series? They seem quite a bit more fleshed out than most (what I thought to be) OCs. Would like to see more of this one day!
| LilC16 chapter 12 . 2/23/2011
I thought this was one of the best stories ever made... too bad its abandoned.
| AkatsuFatechan chapter 12 . 11/7/2010
Waaah, will you never update the most amusing story ever. Sulk. Sulk. I feel like crying, you must hate all of us readers.
| SilkenRoseDreams chapter 12 . 10/5/2010
OMFG! I have never read anything even remotely like this, and I LOVIT! WOOT! I can't wait till the next chapter! Harry is so adorable!
| staidwaters chapter 2 . 8/21/2010
"dore" is "door"? (thwaps self on head). I was sure it was "dough" and it you showing how blah and uninteresting she considered such an awesome trick. See, I'm multi-lingual, with one of the languages being Japanese, which often uses an "ah" sound to replace"r" sounds when saying English words. The first story of yours I read that mentioned dore described it as dough-like, and my brain immediate went dough-doah-dor-dore. I did consider the "door" angle, but thought that was a secondary joke that the reader was probably not expected to get-the "dough" thing was so much more obvious and funny, after all! Which, thinking about it, is absurd because not many readers would have the background to do the logic twists I did with "dough".
I feel very silly now.
| Axwrend chapter 12 . 5/24/2010
This is a great story. My one suggestion being that Harry eventually grows out of the cross dressing habit...eventually...or learns to shape shift.
And, this is bugging me...IS THIS A CROSSOVER? And if not, can you make it one(as in, make a story with Mercia as the main character. And by story...I mean actual book people buy. Because I would buy it)
The characters have such history for them that I actually looked them up on google, and found nothing. Disappointing if the series exists, even more so if not because I want to read more about Mercia! She's amazing!
Thank you for reading this...if you read this...