|Reviews for Then Came the Dawn|
| GreaterBeastXellas chapter 5 . 2/2
I miss this fic so much.
| Clockwork Eden chapter 1 . 3/20/2014
I have literally not slept most of the week and went into work tired just wondering what the hell was going to happen next. Excuse my language but you are such a fucking fantastic writer and you write xellos so, so perfectly. It's rare, it really is. You have such a solid grasp on the character's and their personalities and I'm completely engripped in this story you wrote was ago. I can only hope you update despite how long it's been. And tomorrow after work I'm at least going to find a way to contact you like a normal person and not through anon review and at least tip my hat to you if I can't inspire you to continue.
| CMY chapter 5 . 4/19/2010
Read the entire trilogy from beggining up to here. Quite a tale you've woven, and nothing short of a tragedy that it was never finished.
With only one other Slayers fanfiction writer I consider worth reading nowadays, my choices have been kind of narrow. It's nice to read something good for a change.
TIOT was a pleasant story for me. I never really liked the idea of Valgaav being reborn anyway. This alternate setting made more sense to me.
Being united with an incredibly ancient and powerful dark lord would have given Valgaav access to secrets untold to both the Shinzoku and Mazoku races. Had he survived like in your story, he would no doubt have at least brokered the interests of many powerful beings.
ATTN was by far the best of the trilogy, though I can't say I enjoyed watching Filia being driven to semi-madness by that accursed Mazoku. I think she might have prefered it if Xellos had simply forced himself on her. She went to so much effort to hide and smuggle her child away from him, only to discover that he had known about it from the beggining, and that all of her efforts were in vain. From that last point addressing her, she may one day seriously contemplate suicide.
Then Came The Dawn. Christ in Heaven, I wish you'd hadn't discontinued it. The first chapter was quite a shock. If what Valgaav recalled was true, it meant that Xellos had to resort to base trickery to get him to leave the home. With three years having passed, L-Sama knows what state Filia is in now. She might have become permanently insane. If that has happened, Valgaav's in for an entire new world of hurt if he ever manages to contact her again.
Von, their child. Separated from his mother while still in the egg, born in Seyruun, raised in the palace. He may be living in ignorant bliss now in his toddler years, but his childhood and probably his entire life will be a hard one nonetheless.
Valgaav meeting his son was quite an emotional moment. For three years, he had never known that he had become a father. This is definitely something new for him.
Lina deciding to aid Valgaav, her one-time enemy, against Xellos, her somewhat ally, seems to be an odd decision, but then considering the situations Lina Inverse gets herself into, I can't say I was thoroughly surprised.
Still, I doubt there wouldn't be any tension. There might still be some bad blood simmering between the Ancient Dragon and Lina's group, considering the Gaav/HellMaster situation. Valgaav would probably feel apprehensive or reluctant to speak to her about it, considering that the reason he tried to kill them all was a lie and a mistake all along.
I loved your portrayals of Gravos and Jillas throughout the trilogy, particularly the latter. The one-eyed fox is far ahead of his time. If it wasn't for his dogged loyalty, he could probably make a killing mass-producing machines and weapons. As for Gravos, I liked the accent you gave him. A one-time fighter becoming a home servant and now a babysitter, whether he likes it or not, still must have made an impact on him.
I think Lina attempting to teach Valgaav spells from her arsenal could be downright dangerous. I can't put my finger on it, but a dragon calling on the power of ol' Ruby Eye does not bode well. Plus, if he DOES use it, he could obliterate the entire town his mate is half-living in.
Lina must really care about Filia if she's willing to teach a one-time foe a very lethal spell that, to my knowledge, she currently is the only person capable of casting. The Ragna Blade is not the same as the Dragon Slave, and the knowledge of a spell that calls upon the strength of the most powerful being in the universe being given to another person seems downright ominous.
At this last point in the story, it seems that Zelgadis would be getting involved. However, having a reputation of placing his own interests first before deciding if he should bother to aid others, I think there might be a problem, especially considering that the particular person seeking his help once tried to kill him.
Finally, Xellos. If my theory holds, he would probably have foreseen that sooner or later Valgaav would realize that something was off on that day he drove himself out of Filia's life. And following that, that he would take the only logical choice open to him; to seek help from Lina.
It is not wise to underestimate Beastmaster Zellas's servant.
This fanfic you've written, Chaos, has been an extraordinary story to read. Thank you for taking the time and energy to write it for us.
And I humbly request that someday, if you wish, to pick it back up again. So few Slayers fanfics are worth reading now, and I can only hope that you'd revive one of these precious few.
As alwways, the decision will rest with you.
Thank you nonetheless, Zanne Chaos.
P.S. One chilling thought: While the dragons who worshipped the Fire Dragon King are now all dead, there are still other Goldens out there. If they ever discovered that one of their own had mated with an Ancient, and a technical war criminal to boot, plus having conceived an illegitimate, hybrid child, Xellos would not be the only one Valgaav and his new allies would have to worry about...
| SilverGhostKitsune chapter 5 . 11/30/2006
Update, Update, Update! Fabulous fic! I look forward to the next chappie!
| SilverGhostKitsune chapter 2 . 11/30/2006
Kawaii chappie! I am so glad you let him meet his son. Xellos should die and burn, Amelia deserves to see Zelgadis, Martina should be dragon slaved ten fold, and Filia should get to see Val again! However, these are just the rantings of one psycotic SilverGhostKitsune. Love the fic and I am going to try to finish the next chappies when I get the chance!
| zakipoe79 chapter 5 . 3/5/2006
Oh I so wish you would post more stories up here. I really love the way you write, and there are not nearly enough good Val/Filia Stories that I have been able to find. Well, whatever floats your boat, I guess. I'll daydream the rest up, I suppose... TT *sniffle-sob*
| eli chapter 5 . 11/14/2005
Aww hell, I just realized that I asked you to completely rewrite more that HALF your story! I'm sorry. I just wanted to clear the fact that I wanted for you to maybe put these differences that I asked you for in a different Alternate Story Line for it(for moi *blushing at asking so much*) if you feel up to the little challenge. Sigh. Sorry again! Byebye
| eli chapter 5 . 11/14/2005
OMG! CONTINUE! I want to see Filia and Valgaav and Von happily ever after!
RIGHT NOOW! I really liked your "The Illusion of Truth" but after a while it started to drag on a bit-but of cource it's a perfectly valid story. And a good one too. I just wish it wasn't so angsty and full of misunderstandings right at chapter 22 and the fact that Filia was is in the hands of Xelloss that way...it just made me want to punch somebody or rip out that deep nasty feeling in my gut(I SWEAR that's how I feel right now after reading these shocking last events)...if you ever feel up to it can you PLEASE rewrite chapter 22 of TIOT for me so that she has been trasported away by Xelloss holding her captive so she could be his "queen" after HE gave her that thump on the head and sprained ankle and hurt Val to uncontiousness? And then cut to the chase where he, Jillas and Gravos go find Lina and them(I liked what happened when they met up! I just simply can't really stomach reading what happened in between...-.-) and then when they defeated Xelloss or whatever everyone would just live happily ever after and then the news would come that Filia was pregnant with her and Val's child? PLESE...? I suppose it's a kinda selfish question but I would really like you to, of cource if you feel like it-at least 4 the heck of it!
Well, in any event you r a very talented writer. I noticed some spelling mistakes but that's about it.
OMG r u able to do wut I asked? The angst and suspense is KILLING me(but I do so want to read you and your fiancè's story! Bacause it's so good, but 4 reasons aforementioned this is why I'm prctically BEGGING for a different set of events from chap.22 to where they all meet up to try and thwart Xelloss)!
Well, I guess I've been bothering you enough, so I'll stop now! Peace and love, man!
| greenteagoddess chapter 5 . 8/28/2005
YOU are the most inherently evil author that I have ever read! How could you possibly write such a wonderful piece, which I have spent the last 14 hours reading, and then leave it? Don't you realize how much you are killing your fans? Please don't tell me that this is as far as you're going to go... please let there be an end. We need closure! Such a fantastic story doesn't deserve to be left unfinished.
| Rilum chapter 5 . 7/15/2005
SUGOI...! I love this trilogy! It's SO good! Please update soon! .
| Mwafwa chapter 5 . 2/13/2005
WHA SUGOI! I LOVE THIS TRILOGY! For the past 4 days I've been reading it from the start of "The Illusions of Truth"! I'M SO HOOKED ON TO THIS! XD Also, I LOVE how the characters are IC! And what's happened to Xellos and Filia? Is Filia in love with him now (since he gave her the impression that he killed Val and that he's been with her for a while) or does she still have a soft spot for Val? GA Update soon! This is DEFINATELY being added to my Favorite Stories list as well has you for my Favorite Author! -
| sars chapter 1 . 9/29/2004
UPDATE! I don't think I can wait until the 21st! Have pity on your readers and please update. This story is too incredible not to be finished.
| Kaeru Soyokaze chapter 5 . 9/6/2004
I love this story! And finally, we get to see Zel! Please...update...somewhat soon, onegai? I realize you're probably busy, but this is an excellent story...arc? Is that what they're called?
| Inverse-chan chapter 5 . 3/28/2004
I love this series! Please update soon! You make Xellos seem so... evil. Which is actually kind of funny. Uh... if it's not too much trouble... could you review some of my fics?
| LucKyo chapter 5 . 1/27/2004
I've read and love all your stories. I'll definitely read anything you write. Please contine soon. Some of us don't have lives... D