You wouldn't say "mine relationship," so don't say "mine and Edward's relationship." Use MY. And put yourself last. ("Edward's and my relationship")

You really have a problem with switching verb tenses..

Leave her alone! It’s what she wants not you guys.

This story is WONDERFUL! I absolutely loved it.

He should have tortured him for a lot longer just because he could. The horrible things he did and would have done to the rest of the family are horrendous. He didn’t deserve to die quickly. They should’ve prolonged his torture just because his is the worst betrayal ever- family for power- disgusting.

I don’t know why she doesn’t just go with her gut. At any time his job could take him away from her. She needs to trust her feelings.

Ahhh! I was hoping to actually get some of James’s torture like all of it! We need retribution!

Bella needs to tell the family that James was going to rape her so they can cut his dick off before they cut out his tongue. He needs SERIOUS torture! I am soooo mad!

I think I get why Bella didn’t fight back, but I think Bella AND Rose could have overtaken 1 guy. Got his gun or knocked him out with their rage alone. I can’t wait to see what happens. Reading on…

I don’t understand why Edward would think that. Was something set up to make him think this? And why would he believe James over Bella He’s a sleaze bag.

Not sure why I get the feeling that James is working with an opposing family. I’m glad Edward is opening up to Bella too. Information is power.

Black definitely black.

Yo do just fine with the lemons. I’m not sure what you are worried about, you write very well. Again, LOVING another one of your stories so much. Cannot wait for more . So wonderful that I don’t have to! Reading on…

I’m wondering when they will start sharing a room even if they are not have it sex. If Emmett had stayed over, I’m sure he would have asked some questions about their separate bedrooms.

I thought I caught that when he said “You are perfect for me.” after she admitted that she was a virgin before they made love. I wasn’t 100% sure, but I assumed that is what he meant. I am so happy that This was the case. It also explains his reaction to everything. Now that they have talked a bit more they can finally get somewhere too.